Talk:Indianmeal moth/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Cwmhiraeth (talk · contribs) 09:49, 11 January 2018 (UTC)

I propose to review this, and will study it in detail shortly. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 09:49, 11 January 2018 (UTC)

First reading

I have read through the article which is in general well-written. Here are a few points for starters:

• The lead needs to be rewritten. It is supposed to be a summary of the rest of the article and not introduce any information not mentioned in the main body of the text. It should not need any citations, because the information will be cited elsewhere. There is nothing currently in the lead about the behavioral issues you discuss in the Mating section.
• It is usual to start with a taxonomy section, and then a Description section, with the Distribution section coming later.
• The distribution and habitat section is duplicated by the food resources section.
• The Enemies section is in bulleted style and should be converted into prose.
  • When you have dealt with these issues, I will make some more specific comments about the content and prose. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 14:23, 11 January 2018 (UTC)
  • Someone add humans to the list of enemies 0w0 catt0s (talk) 06:08, 17 January 2020 (UTC)

No action has been taken on any of the comments I made above and I am closing this review as "Fail". I believe the expansion of the article was part of a school/college course, but the students have not raised the article to the required GA standard. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 19:24, 25 January 2018 (UTC)