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Reviewer: Racepacket (talk) 21:38, 14 March 2011 (UTC) GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria
Thank you for nominating this article. No disamb. or invalid external links.
- Is it reasonably well written?
- A. Prose quality:
- "Later it advised on legislation" - comma after later
- "The final draft of his speech was handed to President Truman at the Potsdam "->" The final draft of President Truman's speech was handed to him at the Potsdam " - pronoun antecedent
- "the preparation of press releases for the President and the Secretary of War " - was it a press release or a speech? Why don't you call it a "prepared statement" and use that phrase consistently? "Press releases" plural implies separate ones for the Prez and the SecWar. Was it one or two?
- There were two. Inserted "separate". The practice at the time was for press releases to be read out aloud at a press conference, and copies distributed.
- "August 6, Truman announced that:"->"August 6, Truman released the prepared statement which said in part that:"
- "Bush, Conant and Irvin Stewart had produced a proposal for legislation to control nuclear energy in July 1944."->" in July 1944, before the Committee formed, Bush, Conant and Irvin Stewart had produced an outline for proposed legislation to control nuclear energy."
- "He submitted the proposals" - who is he? Conant. Oops. Added.
- " introduced into the Senate legislation for an alternative atomic energy bill,"->" introduced an alternative Senate bill on atomic energy,"
- Not to be picky, but it was an alternative bill, not an alternative type of atomic energy.
- "even though the War Department bill was primarily a civilian bill as well."->"even though the May-Johnson bill also included primarily civilian control as well." re-worded.
- B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:
- A. Prose quality:
- Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
- A. References to sources:
- B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:
- C. No original research:
- Is it broad in its coverage?
- A. Major aspects:
- B. Focused:
- Is it neutral?
- Fair representation without bias:
- Fair representation without bias:
- Is it stable?
- No edit wars, etc:
- No edit wars.
- No edit wars, etc:
- Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
- A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:
- B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
- A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:
- Overall:
- Pass or Fail:
- This article represents significant work by its author. Putting review on hold for you to address concerns. Racepacket (talk) 00:21, 15 March 2011 (UTC)
- It was a joint work by myself and User:Cuppysfriend. All the prose quality issues seem to be in my half... I think all the concerns have been addressed. Hawkeye7 (talk) 02:10, 15 March 2011 (UTC)
- This article represents significant work by its author. Putting review on hold for you to address concerns. Racepacket (talk) 00:21, 15 March 2011 (UTC)
- Pass or Fail:
Please take another look at "alternative atomic energy" discussed above and we are done. Thanks, Racepacket (talk) 05:34, 15 March 2011 (UTC)
- Done. Hawkeye7 (talk) 19:52, 15 March 2011 (UTC)
Congratulations on another good article. Racepacket (talk) 23:14, 15 March 2011 (UTC)