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Reviewer: -- Lil_℧niquℇ №1 [talk] 12:38, 11 January 2011 (UTC)Reply

The review will begin in due course. I will post on your talk page when its begun. -- Lil_℧niquℇ №1 [talk] 12:38, 11 January 2011 (UTC)Reply

But, Canadian Singles chart does not have a template. Also, European Hot 100 and Belgium Ultratip Flanders and Italy are not correctly sourced by the template.. Novice7 | Talk 08:21, 13 January 2011 (UTC)Reply

More comments to come following my break... -- Lil_℧niquℇ №1 [talk] 23:00, 12 January 2011 (UTC)Reply


  • Introduction
    • What is the significance of mentioning the remix in the lead? Was it released anywhere? Did it chart? Did it receive coverage from reliable third party sources? -- Lil_℧niquℇ №1 [talk]
I added this in because there is a separate section on Remixes. As the lead should summarize everything, I thought this should be added too. If it should not be included, I'll remove it. Novice7 | Talk 08:17, 17 January 2011 (UTC)Reply
    • Your analysis of the critical reception is incorrect. Critics praised the song for its themes of new-found love and up-tempo production but criticised Simpson's singing and the sexual nature of the song's lyrics. -- Lil_℧niquℇ №1 [talk]
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    • where it reached → peaked (overuse of the word reach). Plus best achievements should come first, so eleven in the UK, fifteen in the US and top-twenty in ten other countries. -- Lil_℧niquℇ №1 [talk]
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    • The song's accompanying music video → "Irresistable"'s accompanying music video, (overuse of phrase, the song). -- Lil_℧niquℇ №1 [talk]
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    • Phrase about revealing clothes is a little bit of WP:OR. I'd stick to something like... "had a James Bond theme and features scenes where Simpson is dressed as a spy on a mission". -- Lil_℧niquℇ №1 [talk]
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  • Background
    • The second paragraph beginning "Sheyne was also involved in the song's melody..." isn't well structured. For example Sheyne's contribution to the background vocals seems misplaced. Try and summarise Sheyne's involvement in the song in two sentences together. -- Lil_℧niquℇ №1 [talk]
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  • Composition
    • "Its beat is set in common time and moves at a tempo of 94 beats per minute.[6] It also has the sequence of Am–Dm7–F–E7 as its chord progression.[6]" → "The beat is set in a common time of 94 betas per minute, with a chord progression of Am–Dm7–F–E7"[6]. (better flow). -- Lil_℧niquℇ №1 [talk]
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    • Stephen Thomas Erlewine of Allmusic, while reviewing the album of the same name, stated that the song and "A Little Bit", another track on the album, were "double-punch" (slight tong-twister., re-write). -- Lil_℧niquℇ №1 [talk]
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    • "Similarly, Chuck Taylor of Billboard also reviewed the favorably," → Similarly Billboard's Chuck Taylor also reviewed the song positively, adding... (introduce some variation plus make the paragraph make sense). -- Lil_℧niquℇ №1 [talk]
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    • Add some comments to the final bit about the negative reception. E.g. However there was some negative criticism towards the lyrics and digital quality of the song.... -- Lil_℧niquℇ №1 [talk]
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  • Commercial performance
    • "fter weeks of ascending the chart, it reached its peak position of number fifteen, on the issue dated July 14, 2001" sounds very informal. Try "In Mid-July 2001, it reached its peak of number fifteen". (too many dates makes it sound like a journal). -- Lil_℧niquℇ №1 [talk]
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    • But, in New Zealand, the song debuted at number forty-five on the week dated July 29, 2001. The following week, the song dropped to number fifty before peaking at number forty-one.[24] → Although in New Zealand the single debut at number forty-five and dropped to number fifty the subsequent week, it eventually peaked at number forty-one. (you need to add a source to show the dip in chart position). -- Lil_℧niquℇ №1 [talk]
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  • There are three paragraphs. Can you tell me which sentence?
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  • Couldn't find any. But will try.
  • I'll surely try to find more reviews.
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    • According to Slant Magazine, his remix of the song contains soulful ornamental vocals and Giorgio Moroder-style disco strings... According to Slant Magazine, Hector's remix.... (it sounds like slant magazine did the remix). -- Lil_℧niquℇ №1 [talk]
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    • Reference [35] Slant → Slant Magazine (the name of the publication)
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  • Live performances
    • Simpson performed "Irresistible" on various occasions, including some televised appearances. She also performed the song on her DreamChaser Tour (2001) and Reality Tour (2004). For the DreamChaser Tour, Simpson wanted it to feature her as a singer and dancer in the mold of performers like Britney Spears.[37] - rewrite. this is badly written. Maybe start with Irresistible was performed a considerable number of times by Simpson between 2001 and 2004. It was included on the setlist of her DreamChaser Tour (2001) and Reality Tour (2004). In the book People in the News: Jessica Simpson and Nick Lachey, Terri Dougherty wrote that ....". -- Lil_℧niquℇ №1 [talk] 01:46, 24 January 2011 (UTC)Reply
  • Rewrote to something better (I hope). Please do tell me if it needs more fixing.
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  • Credits and personnel
    • Unless I'm mistaken, the remix is not included on the album so you couldn't have got the credits from the liner notes... -- Lil_℧niquℇ №1 [talk]
Actually, the remix EP has the credits for remixes. Should I add a source for it separately?
Yes please....just in the interest of good referencing. I have no doubt personally. -- Lil_℧niquℇ №1 [talk] 17:44, 24 January 2011 (UTC)Reply
  • Done Added separately.
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    • Change === Charts === to === Weekly charts ===, === Year-end charts === to === Yearly charts ===. (parallel and equivocal headings). -- Lil_℧niquℇ №1 [talk]
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  • References.
  • Got a ref. But, where to put?
  • A comment at the end of the background section would suffice. "Irresistable" is the title song from Simpson's second album and was released from MM DD, YYYY as the album's lead single.[1] -- Lil_℧niquℇ №1 [talk]
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    • ref [14], title should = IRRESISTIBLE (Legal Title) BMI Work #5572061, author= (the songwriters!) -- Lil_℧niquℇ №1 [talk]
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    • the reference style from the chart performance section doesn't match that in the charts section. In the latter it shows as ARIA Top 50 Singles. Hung Medien but in the former you've put charts.org.nz. Hung Medien. It is is inconsistent. -- Lil_℧niquℇ №1 [talk]
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  • Added US. Should I be more specific (like New York or California)?
Yes please. Otherwise the references are considered incomplete. -- Lil_℧niquℇ №1 [talk]
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