Talk:Irresistible (The X-Files)/GA1

Latest comment: 12 years ago by Glimmer721 in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: Glimmer721 (talk · contribs) 03:01, 9 December 2011 (UTC)Reply

Will get to this shortly. Glimmer721 talk 03:01, 9 December 2011 (UTC)Reply

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  • The lead is too short; it seems all X-Files GA episode articles have at least two paragraphs.
  • The link to the episode "Orison" in the lead redirects to The X-Files (season 7)--isn't there a more specific link to a portion of that article?
  • A lot of overlinking in the plot section: funeral, funeral home, cemetary, profile, wreaths, hallucinations, counseling, fingerprint, refrigerator, closet, foyer, narration, evil.
  • Throughout the first paragraph of the "Plot" section the character is referred to as "Donnie", but for the rest he is "Pfaster". Be consistant. (I would use "Pfaster").
  • Whos is Cris Carter? (give his title, such as "showrunner" or "episode writer")
  • "Dana Scully" and "Gillan Anderson" should not be linked again the the production section, and she should only be referred to by her last name as she has been.
  • Who is Joe College? There isn't an article for him, but the sentence does not make sense if we don't know who he is. (Apparently someone not scary)
  • The production section seems to be a lot of quotes preceeded by "[so-and-so] said/stated..." A little varity is needed, and maybe less quotes/more paraphrasing.
  • Link Duane Barry
  • Explain that Millenium is a TV series.
  • In the "Reception" section it says "Nick Chinlund as Donny Pfaster"...change this to "Chinlund as Pfaster" as he does not need to be reintroduced.
  • Link "Monster-of-the-Week" in "Reception" section? ([List of Monster-of-the-Week characters in The X-Files]]).

I will place this on hold while these issues are fixed. Glimmer721 talk 01:43, 10 December 2011 (UTC)Reply

Not the nominator, but when I drove-by this review I figured I'd fix some of the issues. I've gotten round to everything other than the use of "X said..." in the production heading, might give that a bash tonight. As for "Joe College", it's not a character - that's a sort of figure of speech. "Joe X" is a way of saying "your average X-type person", like "Joe Public" or "Joe Politician". So "Joe College" is just some college student. GRAPPLE X 02:23, 10 December 2011 (UTC)Reply
Thanks for stoppin by. What I actually meant for the "Orison" link was if there was a way to link it directly to its portion on the episode table of the season 7 article. Glimmer721 talk 17:29, 10 December 2011 (UTC)Reply
Got it to point to the episode in question in the season article's list of episodes, if that's what you were after. GRAPPLE X 03:13, 11 December 2011 (UTC)Reply
I've fixed the little things that were left and I'm going to go ahead and pass this. Great work! Glimmer721 talk 17:21, 11 December 2011 (UTC)Reply