Talk:Isaac Franklin/GA1

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Nominator: Generalissima (talk · contribs) 06:14, 14 April 2024 (UTC)Reply

Reviewer: Unexpectedlydian (talk · contribs) 20:52, 12 June 2024 (UTC)Reply


Hello! I will be reviewing this article as part of Good review circle 3. I'll be using the table below. Comments to follow soon! Unexpectedlydian♯4talk 20:52, 12 June 2024 (UTC)Reply

Hi @Generalissima, thank you for your work on this article - an interesting subject, well-written and well-sourced. I've left some comments below. Feel free to push back wherever you think necessary! Unexpectedlydian♯4talk 14:44, 15 June 2024 (UTC)Reply
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1. Well-written:
  1a. the prose is clear, concise, and understandable to an appropriately broad audience; spelling and grammar are correct.

Lead

  • he was able to purchase a massive property Not sure about the word "massive here" - could just be conflicting dialect, but seems a bit casual. Could change to something like "large"? There are a mumber of instances of the word "massive" throughout the article. If you agree, I'd suggest changing a few.
    • Removed most of the usages of massive here. - G

Early life and family

  • Maybe link "frontier"? I'm not familiar too familiar with the history or geography so wouldn't be able to tell you what it refers to.
    • Okay. - G
  • James Franklin amassed hundreds of acres of property along the north shore of the Cumberland River, alongside a significant number of slaves: by the end of the 1810s, he owned 26 enslaved people. Does the "significant number of slaves" refer to 26, or is it implied that the number had reduced to 26 by the end of the 1810s?
    • The 26. I realize adding a period clarifies this a bit more. - G
  • where he was instructed in the "mere rudiments of education". State in the prose that this is a quote from Rothman.
    • Oh, it's not actually from Rothman; it's a quote there too. It seems to be from an obituary.

Early career

  • By 1821, he mainly purchased from the mid-Atlantic. Could you link "mid-Atlantic" or maybe expand a bit on what/where this means?
    • Clarified.

Franklin & Armfield

  • Later described as a "three-story townhouse attached to a massive private jail" and "Franklin's black hole" Described by who?
    • Clarified and rephrased.

Planting

  • A complex of 15–20 brick slave houses "laid out like a small town" was erected on the property Who described it this way? Worth adding something in the prose about said that.
    • Realized I could just paraphrase here.

Personal life and death

  •  Y

Legacy

  •  Y


  1b. it complies with the Manual of Style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation.

Lead sections

  •  Y

Layout

  •  Y

Words to watch

  • See comment in section 1a about the repetition of the word "massive".

Fiction

  • N/A

List incorporation

  • N/A


2. Verifiable with no original research:
  2a. it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline.
  • References and citations are in the correct sections and well-formatted.


  2b. reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose).

Source review

  • No issues found with the reliability or relevance of sources.

Spot check

  • I will start by reviewing approx. 10% of citations.

Rothman 2022

  • Some citations used for Rothman 2022 cite pages which are not part of the article. Are these citations maybe meant for Rothman 2021 instead? For instance, citation numbers 44, 58 and 59.
    • Oops, yes. My bad; fixed. - G
  • p.227  Y
  • pp. 237-242  Y
  • p.243 Could be missing something, but the first para of "Bypass of trade restrictions" doesn't seem to be backed up by p.243? P.243 refers immediately to the November 19, 1831 legislature, not the August 1831 slave rebellion or Franklin being worried about the legislature passing.
    • Ah, fixed the cite. It's the last part of 242 and the first of 243. -G
  • p.249  Y

Stephenson 1938

  • p.12  Y
  • pp.14-16  Y
  • pp. 55-56  Y

Tadman 2007

  • p.254  Y

Christian 1976

  • p.7  Y

Bancroft 1931

  • pp.58-59  Y

Gudmestad 2003

  • pp.24-25  Y


  2c. it contains no original research.
  • Content from spot-checks that this contains no original research. Will check back in after prose review.


  2d. it contains no copyright violations or plagiarism.
  • Source spot-checks show no clear evidence of copyvio or plagiarism.
  • Copyvio detector brings up nothing of concern.


3. Broad in its coverage:
  3a. it addresses the main aspects of the topic.
  • Main aspects of the topic are all addressed.


  3b. it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style).
  • Detailed history of life and business, but I'm content that none of it is unfocussed.


  4. Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each.
  • Article content is presented neutrally. This is handled well for the contentious subject.


  5. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute.
  • No evidence of edit-warring or instability.


6. Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio:
  6a. media are tagged with their copyright statuses, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content.
  • Images are all tagged with copyright status.


  6b. media are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions.
  • Images are all relevant to the topic and well-described.


  7. Overall assessment.
@Generalissima Great work, very happy to pass this now! Unexpectedlydian♯4talk 20:11, 21 June 2024 (UTC)Reply
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