Talk:Ishe Komborera Africa/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 19:09, 17 October 2016 (UTC)

Will begin this soon. JAGUAR  19:09, 17 October 2016 (UTC)

• The lead should be expanded in order to summarise the article, particularly the second paragraph
• The first reference in the lead makes no mention of "God Bless Africa" or "God Bless Zimbabwe"
• "and then again four days later closure of the first meeting of the Bantu National Congress" - error. and again four days after the closure?
• "Initially despite that connotation" - I'd remove "initially"
• "One of their considerations was to ban performance of "Ishe Komborera Africa" in African schools and public performance of it often made people liable for arrest" - as it often
• "such as; Tanzania used "Mungu ibariki Afrika", Zambia used "Stand and Sing of Zambia, Proud and Free" (to the same tune) and Transkei who used "Nkosi Sikielel' 'Afrika"" - reads a bit odd. I would remove "such as" and just begin the sentence with Tanzania
• "The act also made it a criminal offense" - offence
• "In 2004, at the 2004 Africa Cup of Nations in Tunisia" - 2004 is already mentioned so remove "In 2004"
• No dead links
• No dab links

I found a few errors, but once they're clarified this should pass. JAGUAR  21:04, 17 October 2016 (UTC)

@Jaguar: I have fixed the errors that you raised here. The C of E God Save the Queen! (talk) 09:17, 18 October 2016 (UTC)

Thanks! Promoted JAGUAR  11:04, 18 October 2016 (UTC)