Talk:Italian battleship Roma (1940)/GA1

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Reviewer: Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 20:04, 11 January 2010 (UTC) GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

1. Is it reasonably well written?

   A. Prose quality:

   Couple of awkwardnesses to clean-up exploded the second main battery turrets' magazines and However, an attack upon Italia on Roma at 1537

   Second done, but the first is questionable. I can't think of a satisfactory way to reword it.[1] A little help? :) —Ed (talk • majestic titan) 05:08, 15 January 2010 (UTC)

   Maybe exploded the magazine of turret #2 or B or whatever the Italians used might work?

   This is done, also replied on my talk. —Ed (talk • majestic titan) 08:24, 23 January 2010 (UTC)

   B. MoS compliance:

2. Is it factually accurate and verifiable?

   A. References to sources:

   Why is the Wade book there?

   It's my reference for the list of cruisers there. I may be able to replace that with references to Whitley's Cruisers of World War II... —Ed (talk • majestic titan) 05:08, 15 January 2010 (UTC)

   As long as it's cited it's OK, I just didn't see a cite the first time around.

   The flooding caused the inboard propellers to stop for want of electricity This gave me pause; I wasn't aware that Roma was a turbo-electric ship. You might want to detail what happened more precisely to avoid this sort of confusion. After the second Fritz-X hit you said that the magazines were flooding, but they exploded anyway. This seems counter-intuitive. Can you explain it a little better? Parsecboy has a habit of adding a couple of brief paragraphs recapitulating the basic stats of the ship right after the lead. I really like his idea and it might be useful here as well. But that won't affect this GAR if you decide not to do so.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 19:37, 23 January 2010 (UTC)

   That's fixed, but I'm not sure on your second point. G&D say it "probably exploded in the forward engine room, causing additional fires and flooding the magazines for number 2 main-battery turret and the forward 152-mm turret on the port side. The explosion of this bomb caused massive flooding and excessive strain on an already weakened hull girder. The number 2 381-mm turret was blown overboard by the violent explosion of its magazines a few seconds later."

Ok, it doesn't entirely make sense, but if that's what your source reads... Maybe the flooding wasn't enough to extinguish any fires, etc.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 19:01, 26 January 2010 (UTC)

1. I'll try to add those paragraphs sometime, thanks for the thought. Parsec came up with a good idea there. :) —Ed (talk • majestic titan) 16:46, 26 January 2010 (UTC)

   B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:

   C. No original research:

2. Is it broad in its coverage?

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3. Is it neutral?

   Fair representation without bias:

4. Is it stable?

   No edit wars, etc:

5. Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?

   A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:

   B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:

6. Overall:

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