Talk:J. T. Compher/GA1
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Reviewer: Steelkamp (talk · contribs) 05:25, 20 April 2022 (UTC)
Hi. I will be doing a good article review of this article. I aim to have my part of the review done within the next few days. Note that I don't know very much about ice hockey, which has its advantages and disadvantages when reviewing.
Good article criteria
editWell written
editEarly life and personal life:
After moving, Compher met a preschool classmate who invited him to go ice skating
– How about this instead:After moving, Compher met a classmate in preschool who invited him to go ice skating
. That just makes it clearer what happened. Steelkamp (talk) 06:15, 20 April 2022 (UTC)- Done, and changed "After moving" to "After the move"
- Maybe mention that Jesse and Morgan are younger sisters of J. T. Steelkamp (talk) 06:15, 20 April 2022 (UTC)
- Added
Compher's full name is Joseph Taylor Compher. He said in an NHL interview that his parents first named him by his initials before deciding how to fill out "J.T.".
– Maybe this would fit better under "Early life". Steelkamp (talk) 06:15, 20 April 2022 (UTC)- I disagree with the move, but I have rephrased this sentence for flow
He is the older brother of Jesse Compher, who played ice hockey with the Boston University Terriers and United States women's national ice hockey team, winning a silver medal at the 2022 Winter Olympics with the latter.
– This sounds weird given that Jesse is mentioned earlier in the article. Maybe change it to something like this:Compher's younger sister Jesse grew up to become a professional ice hockey player as well. She played with the Boston University Terriers and United States women's national ice hockey team, winning a silver medal at the 2022 Winter Olympics with the latter.
Steelkamp (talk) 06:15, 20 April 2022 (UTC)- Rephrased differently. Also added that she is a member of the Wisconsin Badgers, as she announced her transfer there last month.
Playing career - college:
...selected Compher in the second round, 35th overall, of the...
– How about you change this to...selected Compher in the second round, 35th pick overall, of the...
Steelkamp (talk) 07:17, 20 April 2022 (UTC)- Changed to
in the second round with the 35th overall pick
- Changed to
He joined the program for the 2013–14 season,
– What program is this talking about? The Michigan Wolverines? Should be clarified. Steelkamp (talk) 07:17, 20 April 2022 (UTC)- Clarified
- Maybe the Big Ten Conference should be mentioned earlier, like around when the Michigan Wolverines were first mentioned. Steelkamp (talk) 07:17, 20 April 2022 (UTC)
- Done
four-point game from Penn State's David Goodwin.
– What does this mean? It should be reworded to be clearer. Steelkamp (talk) 07:32, 20 April 2022 (UTC)- The Goodwin part isn't really relevant; the only reason it was mentioned in the source is because that source is closer to Penn State than Michigan. Reworded for clarity.
- What I am confused about is the situation with the Buffalo Sabres picking him in the draft, and then him not playing for them. What was the situation there? What sort of contract did he have with them? Is it just the right to use him when his college career is up? Can you elaborate? Steelkamp (talk) 07:49, 20 April 2022 (UTC)
- Compared to the other major North American sports leagues where you have to commit to a team within X number of days of being drafted, the NHL draft works more like "acquiring the rights to a player". This is partially due to a weird quirk where players are drafted at 18, but the minimum age for the American Hockey League, the NHL's main development/minor league, is 20. — GhostRiver 15:06, 21 April 2022 (UTC)
Playing career - Professional:
- Is it considered standard to capitalise playoff games such as
Game 6
andGame 7
? Steelkamp (talk) 00:52, 21 April 2022 (UTC)- Yes; I believe this is to distinguish between regular-season games and playoff games. — GhostRiver 15:06, 21 April 2022 (UTC)
ninth on the Avalanche with 31 points
– This looks weird to me. Wouldn't it make more sense to sayninth for the Avalanche with 31 points
? Steelkamp (talk) 01:15, 21 April 2022 (UTC)- I've seen it both ways. Changed.
Verifiable with no original research
edit- Search of Earwig's Copyvio Detector turned out fine. Steelkamp (talk) 05:44, 20 April 2022 (UTC)
Compher recorded 33 goals and 92 points in 92 games.
– Where do you get those figures from? Steelkamp (talk) 06:15, 20 April 2022 (UTC)- I'm adding together the two totals on his college page:
Recorded 18 goals and 32 assists in 52 games for the Under-18 Team in 2012-13
andAlso recorded 15 goals and 27 assists in 40 games with the Under-17 Team in 2011-12
respectively. — GhostRiver 15:08, 21 April 2022 (UTC)
- I'm adding together the two totals on his college page:
Broad in its coverage
edit- Reference 6 says "He was the captain of the Gold Medal United States National Team Development Program (NTDP) international team this past year". Probably worthy of including that he was the captain in the article. Steelkamp (talk) 07:17, 20 April 2022 (UTC)
- That is actually mentioned in the "International play" section, as the NTDP is effectively split into two programs: the U18 program plays at home against other United States Hockey League teams, while the international team plays in the IIHF World U18 Championship.
- Is there nothing more recent than December last year? Steelkamp (talk) 01:15, 21 April 2022 (UTC)
- Depth forwards tend to get less coverage, but I have added up to the end of the regular season.
Neutral
editStable
edit- Can't see any content disputes on talk page or page history. Page is stable enough to pass. Steelkamp (talk) 05:44, 20 April 2022 (UTC)
Illustrated, if possible
edit- Images have correct licensing. Good choice of images out of the ones on commons. Steelkamp (talk) 05:44, 20 April 2022 (UTC)
- Not required for GA, but I recommend adding alt text to images as it helps with accessibility. Steelkamp (talk) 05:44, 20 April 2022 (UTC)
General
editThat's all from me. I will place the review on hold now. Overall a very good article with extremely good sourcing. Steelkamp (talk) 01:23, 21 April 2022 (UTC)
- Steelkamp Thank you for your patience as I deal with the injuries from my motorcycle collision. I have made changes and left comments accordingly. — GhostRiver 21:52, 6 May 2022 (UTC)
- I'm happy to pass the review now. This is a very good article. If it ever becomes a featured article candidate, I would support. Congratulations and I hope you have a good recovery from your injuries. Steelkamp (talk) 06:05, 7 May 2022 (UTC)