Talk:Jacqueline Pearce/GA1
Latest comment: 2 years ago by Edwininlondon in topic GA Review
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Reviewer: Edwininlondon (talk · contribs) 12:38, 7 January 2022 (UTC)
Happy to review this. At first glance this seems to meet the GA requirements. I will do full review as soon as possible. Edwininlondon (talk) 12:38, 7 January 2022 (UTC) Some general comments:
- sci-fi fans." should be sci-fi fans". as per MOS:INOROUT
- Pearce spent five years working at the Vervet Monkey Foundation --> perhaps add in which country this is
- The text says she was born in Woking, Surrey, but the infobox has Byfleet
- Amended to Byfleet in text (with source added). BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 18:10, 10 January 2022 (UTC)
- She same year, she flew --> In
- the BBC dramatisation --> link BBC (and delink it further on)
- softness and predatoriness." --> softness and predatoriness".
- cited by Steven Duckworth as --> a bit of an intro is needed, as to why we should trust his judgment (e.g. critic? journalist? art professor?)
- the show's primary villain." --> villain".
- original Blakes 7 cast members --> original Blake's 7 cast members
- to recover from Servalan." --> ".
- The Aberdeen Press and Journal reviewer --> The Aberdeen Press and Journal reviewer
- wrote that in his Who Dares Wins: Britain, 1979–1982 (2019) that --> delete the first that
- believes that there is a similarity --> a bit odd that this is present tense
- Amended to "drew a parallell". BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 18:10, 10 January 2022 (UTC)
- flaunt [their] femininity."
- for a generation of sci-fi fans."
- the Hollywood link should probably point to Cinema of the United States
- serial The Two Doctors --> maybe add the year
- Pearce returned to Doctor Who in 2015, this time opposite Hurt, as a regular in the Big Finish audio series based on the adventures of the War Doctor portraying Cardinal Ollistra, a leader of the Time Lords in the Time War[27] --> missing full stop and possibly a comma after War Doctor
- her command."
- alongside Dr Who --> alongside Doctor Who
- her fellow Blake's 7 actor --> her fellow Blake's 7 actor
- in South Africa --> the rule is not to link to countries MOS:OVERLINK
- disillusionment."
- Pearce's second marriage also ended in divorce --> to whom and when? Plus not mentioned in infobox
- The only additional detail I could find was "A brief second marriage, to a teacher of transcendental meditation, also ended in divorce" in the Telegraph obituary. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 20:25, 11 January 2022 (UTC)
- in the Filmography there is another case of Blakes 7
I'll look at the sources tomorrow. Edwininlondon (talk) 23:15, 7 January 2022 (UTC)
Sources:
- Quotations always need a source, even in the lead, so "a sexual awakening for a generation of sci-fi fans."[9]
- Sources all appear reliable
- Muir, John Kenneth, A History and Critical Analysis of Blake's 7, the 1978–1981 British Television Space Adventure --> is this a book? article?
- A Book - added some details. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 18:10, 10 January 2022 (UTC)
- Carter, Meg. "Return of '70s Seven". The Times. p. 36. --> date?
- 33 needs a publisher, isbn and a page number for the quote, and 34 is the same?
- Amended. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 23:37, 14 January 2022 (UTC)
- 32 is the Times obit again, same as 9
- source 11 needs page numbers
- 21 the text actually says "exploit" and not "flaunt [their] femininity"
- 25 does back up the Dr Who claims but not "As well as appearing in the BBC children's programmes Dark Season (alongside Kate Winslet) and Moondial, "
- In the filmography it says "1964 A Question of Happiness Frances 2 episodes: "Fred" and "Watch me I'm a bird" but source 5 says Fred Frances 1964.
- Spotcheck: 1 2 24 36 39 all fine
The other criteria all appear to be met. Edwininlondon (talk) 11:10, 8 January 2022 (UTC)
- @BennyOnTheLoose:Not sure if you noticed I reviewed your nomination, so just pinging you. Do you have time to work on this? Edwininlondon (talk) 16:11, 10 January 2022 (UTC)
- Many thanks, Edwininlondon. Hopefully I've covered off everything from your review. Let me know if anything else is required. Regards, BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 23:37, 14 January 2022 (UTC)
- I believe this article now meets all GA criteria. Nice work. Edwininlondon (talk) 09:37, 15 January 2022 (UTC)
- Many thanks, Edwininlondon. Hopefully I've covered off everything from your review. Let me know if anything else is required. Regards, BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 23:37, 14 January 2022 (UTC)