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Reviewer: Good888 (talk · contribs) 17:33, 1 January 2015 (UTC)Reply

I know that the nominator has since left Wikipedia so if anyone would like to help then go ahead. good888 (talk) 17:33, 1 January 2015 (UTC)Reply

Background

  • "(Haiti and the Dominican Republic, the island was originally colonized by the Spanish Empire until the British seized control of the island in 1655." Unsure why that bracket is there so I would suggest removal.
  • "the island was originally colonized by the Spanish Empire until the British seized control of the island in 1655." Link Spanish Empire.
  • "Jamaica first competed as a British colony at the 1948 Summer Olympics in London, England, and competed at the next two Summer Olympics under the same auspices of the British Empire." Link the British Empire as well.
  • "with the exceptions of in 1956 and 1964" Link the 1956 Summer Olympics under 1956.
  • "Natasha Moodie was the youngest member of the delegation (17 years old), while Samantha Albert was the oldest member of the team (37 years old)." I would perfer a source here.

Athletics

Men's 100 Meters

  • "He advanced to the quarterfinal round." I would suggest quarterfinals rather than quarterfinal round.
  • "In the quarterfinal round" Read above.
  • "taking second place behind Churandy Martina of the Netherlands Antilles" Link Netherlands Antilles.
  • "40 competitors progressed to quarterfinals from the qualification round" The quarterfinals.
  • "He progressed to the semifinal round on August 16." Change to semifinals rather than semifinal round.
  • "During semifinals, Frater was placed in the first heat again." The first heat.
  • "Born in Linstead, a small town to the northwest of Kingston" I would link Kingston.
  • "He progressed to quarterfinals." The quarterfinals.
  • "At quarterfinals, Powell competed in the fifth heat and finished first again with a time of 10.02 seconds." At the quarterfinals.
  • "placing first ahead of Antigua and Barbuda's Daniel Bailey" Link Antigua and Barbuda.
  • "He advanced to quarterfinals." The quarterfinals.
  • "During semifinals, Bolt was placed in the first heat." During the semifinals.

Men's 200 meters

  • "Williams advanced to semifinals." The semifinals.
  • "Williams participated in the first heat of the August 19 semifinal round" Rewrite to "Williams participated in the first heat of the semifinals on August 19."
  • "However, Anderson did not finish the race." Do any sources explain why?
  • "this race was the only one in which he had competed Olympically for the second time" Olympically? I would rewrite to: ""this race was the only one in which he had competed at the Olympics for the second time"
  • "During quarterfinals, Bolt was placed in the first heat." The quarterfinals.

Men's 110 meters hurdles

  • Phillips has also participated in the athletics programs at George Mason University." Change has to had.
  • "Quarterfinals in the event took place on August 19" I would rewrite to: "The quarterfinals took place on August 19."
  • "Richard Phillips participated in the August 20 semifinals in the first heat." Rewrite to: Richard Phillips participated in the semifinals in the first heat which took place on August 20."
  • "Wignall has been affiliated with the Mizuno Track Club in Osaka, Japan." Link Osaka.
  • "He advanced to quarterfinals." The quarterfinals.
  • "Seven athletes competed in the third heat during August 19 quarterfinals, including Wignall." Rewrite to: "Wignall competed in the quarterfinals in the third heat on August 19"
  • "He finished his event in13.36 seconds" Add a space inbetween in and 13.36.
  • "He advanced to semifinals." The semifinals.
  • "Wignall competed against seven other athletes during the August 20 semifinal round." Rewrite to: "Wignall competed against seven other athletes in the semifinals on August 20."

Men's 400 meters hurdles

  • "During semifinals, Markino Buckley participated in the eight-person second heat." During the semifinals.
  • "He advanced to semifinals." He advanced to the semifinals.
  • There is no infomation on how McFarlane did in the final. It only goes up to how he did in the semifinals. I would suggest the following: "Overall, of the semifinal round of sixteen athletes, McFarlane finished in fourth place and again in the finals on August 17.

Men's 400 meters

  • "He progressed to the next round, semifinals," I would suggest: "He progressed to the semifinals."
  • "He did advance to the final round." He did not advance to the final round in truth.

Men's decathlon

  • "where he was the 14th place finalist." I would suggest: "where he finished in 14th place."
  • "Smith participated in shot put participated in the first heat, which included 20 athletes" Rewrite to: "Smith participated in the shot put in the first heat, which included 20 athletes."

Men's 4 x 100 meters relay

  • "It also included 22 year old Nesta Carter, who was born in Banana Ground in Manchester Parish and participated in his first Olympics in this event," Unlink Banana Ground. Also change and to who.

Women's 100 meters

  • "She advanced to quarterfinals." To the quarterfinals.
  • "and Great Britain's Jeanette Kwakye placed behind Polyakova in third place (11.18&nsp;seconds)." Remove the &nsp; in the brackets.
  • "Fraser progressed to the semifinal round." Rewrite to "Fraser progressed to the semifinals"
  • "She advanced to finals." She advanced to the finals.
  • "The Ukraine's Natalia Pogrebniak placed behind Simpson" Remove the from The Ukraine's.
  • "Simpson progressed to the quarterfinal round" Change to quarterfinals.
  • "During the August 16 quarterfinal round" Rewrite to "During the quarterfinals which took place on August 16"
  • "She advanced to semifinals." The semifinals.
  • "but progressed to finals." The finals.
  • "She progressed to the quarterfinal round." She progressed to the quarterfinals.
  • "Of the 40 people who advanced to quarterfinals, Stewart ranked first ahead of the other two Jamaican sprinters in the event. She progressed to semifinals." Change to advanced to the quarterfinals. Also she progressed to the semifinals.

Women's 100 meters hurdles

  • "She advanced to the semifinal round." She advanced to the semifinals.
  • "She was the only Jamaican in the event that year who did not advance to the final round." Remove "that year" from this sentence.
  • "She advanced to the semifinal round." The semifinals.
  • "She advanced to finals, which took place on August 19." She advanced to the finals.
  • "Foster-Hylton progressed to semifinals." The semifinals.

Women's 200 meters

  • "The Ukraine's Nataliia Pygyda placed first" What's with "The Ukraine"?
  • "She advanced to the quarterfinal round." The quarterfinals.
  • "The quarterfinal round took place in August 19." The quarterfinals rather than quarterfinal round.
  • "16 athletes advanced to semifinals" Advanced to the semifinals.
  • "On August 21, Simpson competed in the last race of the year's event." I think it means "On August 21, Simpson competed in the last race of the Olympics?" Unsure.
  • "She was the only Jamaican who did not medal in the event at Beijing." Win a medal.
  • "She advanced to quarterfinals." The quarterfinals.
  • "The August 19 quarterfinal round placed Stewart in the their heat" Their heat? I think it means third heat.
  • "31 athletes who advanced to quarterfinals finished their races." The quarterfinals.
  • "Campbell-Brown advanced to quarterfinals." The quarterfinals.
  • "Campbell-Brown advanced to the semifinal round." The semifinals.
  • "At semifinals, which took place on August 20" At the semifinals.
  • "She progressed to the final event." Change event to round.
  • "At finals, which took place on August 21" At the finals.

Women's 400 meters

  • "She advanced to the semifinal round." The semifinals rather than the semifinal round.
  • "Shericka Williams participated in the first heat of the semifinal round" Change to: "Shericka Williams participated in the first heat of the semifinals"
  • "and has a sister named Clora Williams who runs internationally in the same event." Unsure if this woman is notable enough. I would suggest removal for now.
  • "She advanced to semifinals." The semifinals.
  • "She was the only Jamaican in the event who did not reach finals." The finals.

Women's 800 meters

  • "She progressed to semifinals" The semifinals.

Women's triple jump

  • "She advanced to the final round of her event." Remove "of her event" in this sentence.

Women's shot put

  • "She did not advance to finals the next day." The finals.

Women's 4 x 100 meters relay

  • "Jamaica sent a relay" I would perfer team instead of relay.

Equestrian

  • "but accrued a time penalty of 41.60." Add seconds at the end of this sentence.

Swimming

  • "Then 24 year old Jevon Atkinson, the eldest of the swimming Beijing Jamaicans" I would rewrite to: "Jevon Atkinson, the eldest of the swimming Beijing Jamaicans age 24."

References

  • Link ESPN and Sports Reference.

Phew! That was my longest review at the time of posting. Anyhow, despite a lot of issues, I will not fail this article yet as most are easy copyedits in my opinion. Hence, I am going to place it on hold for seven days if anyone would like to help. good888 (talk) 15:46, 2 January 2015 (UTC)Reply

I'll try to take a look sometime this weekend. --Bentvfan54321 (talk) 16:59, 2 January 2015 (UTC)Reply
@Good888: Okay, I believe everything is taken care of, let me know if anything else needs to be fixed. Thanks! --Bentvfan54321 (talk) 16:22, 3 January 2015 (UTC)Reply
@Bentvfan54321: Many thanks! This article is now GA class! I was originally going to fail this article after seeing the amount of issues. I'm glad I didn't now! good888 (talk) 16:29, 3 January 2015 (UTC)Reply
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