Talk:James Hogun/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Tomobe03 (talk · contribs) 11:25, 18 June 2013 (UTC)

I'll review this article shortly.--Tomobe03 (talk) 11:25, 18 June 2013 (UTC)

• No disambiguation links found (no action required)
• All external links are in order (no action required)
• There are a couple of duplicate links in the article which need be removed per WP:OVERLINK. Those are Continental Congress and British Army.

• Done with Continental Congress. - But for British Army, I only see two - one in the lead, and one in the body. In my understanding of current practice, I can have up to three different appearances of the same wikilink (Infobox, Lead, Body) without overlinking.

• That is correct, but there was an additional piped link in "Imprisonment and death" section. I took the liberty of removing that one just now.

• Sorry, thanks for noticing that one.

• Images are properly licenced and have suitable captions (no action required)
• Referencing appears to be fine (no action required)

Prose:

• He became ill, and died as in the prison on Haddrel's Point on January 4, 1781. I suspect "as" is redundant here.

• Done.

• While I'm aware that the link to Sullivan's Island, South Carolina incorporates the "South Carolina" bit, perhaps it would be better to truncate the displayed text to just "Sullivan's Island", since the same sentence already establishes that the camp was in South Carolina.

• Done.

• Something appears to be missing in Approximately 3,300 Patriot soldiers were confined in prison camps around Charleston like the one at Haddrel's Point, with many ultimately for cramped, unsanitary prison ships. between "ulitmately" and "for".

• Aha - Done.

MOS:

• According to MOS:YEAR, year ranges should be given using the final two digits of the closing year, i.e. 1777–78 instead of 1777–1778

• Done.

• Not really, there are still "1779–1780" and "1777–1778" in the text.

• Done now. Don't know how I missed those. I don't even usually use dashed dates.

• Major General Benjamin Lincoln is mentioned twice in the Southern campaign section and Lincoln is wikilinked at the 2nd instance. Please move the link to the first one and refer to him as "Lincoln" only at the second (per WP:SURNAME)

• Done.

• The above also applies to Brigadier General Jethro Sumner in the Legacy section

• Undone - Not sure what you mean; Sumner is Wikilinked in the Philadelphia section, and is left unlinked in Legacy...

The "Legacy" section mentions "Brigadier General Jethro Sumner". Sumner is discussed before that, in "Promotion and Philadelphia" section and that is where his rank and full name (and wikilink) should appear. In the "Legacy" section he should be referred to simply as "Sumner".

• Done - I thought you were talking about wikilinking alone, as the wikilink has always been in the "Promotion" subsection. I've removed full name and rank from "Legacy".

Nice article, with little to mend. Great work!--Tomobe03 (talk) 16:21, 22 June 2013 (UTC)

@Tomobe03: Many thanks for your comments and review! Let me know if I need to do anything else. Cdtew (talk) 19:33, 22 June 2013 (UTC)

You're welcome. There are still a couple of small things to fix and we're done!--Tomobe03 (talk) 20:42, 22 June 2013 (UTC)

@Tomobe03: Sorry for the confusion; should be all cleaned up now?

No problem. In addition, I moved Sumner's rank to the first mention per WP:SURNAME. Please review that bit and tweak as required. All other outstanding issues having been addressed the article is good to go!--Tomobe03 (talk) 11:32, 23 June 2013 (UTC)