Talk:James van Riemsdyk/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk · contribs) 04:13, 21 October 2021 (UTC)

I will review this later. HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 04:13, 21 October 2021 (UTC)

Review

Philadelphia Flyers

• I think you can expand on his impact as a rookie beyond the team (see [1])
  •  Added — GhostRiver 17:08, 29 October 2021 (UTC)
• He was kind of in the race for the Calder [2], earning 3 votes [3].
  •  Added — GhostRiver 17:08, 29 October 2021 (UTC)
  • LOL, imagine coming back from a 3–0 deficit. Couldn't be the Leafs.
    • This is Philly! We get it done, but we never make it easy! — GhostRiver 17:08, 29 October 2021 (UTC)
• I imagine the "kid line" is because of their youth but I think it can be explained a bit. Maybe alongside young forwards Brayden Schenn and Jakub Voráček
  •  Added — GhostRiver 17:08, 29 October 2021 (UTC)

Toronto Maple Leafs

• I think you can expand a bit on the trade with Schenn. Per this, he was part of trade rumors during the offseason/throughout the year.
  •  Added — GhostRiver 17:08, 29 October 2021 (UTC)
• WL plus-minus
  •  Done — GhostRiver 17:08, 29 October 2021 (UTC)
• In the fourth paragraph, you WL Kadri and Komarov even though they were WL in the first paragraph
  •  Removed — GhostRiver 17:08, 29 October 2021 (UTC)

Second stint with Philadelphia

• took a puck to the leg from the Colorado Avalanche, this seems awkwardly worded to me. It should say during a game against the Colorado Avalanche or even name the specific player.
  •  Fixed — GhostRiver 17:08, 29 October 2021 (UTC)
• Maybe WL to 2020_Stanley_Cup_playoffs#Host_cities to explain the "bubble."
  •  Done — GhostRiver 17:08, 29 October 2021 (UTC)
• Please WL List of 2020–21 NHL Three Star Awards for He was named the NHL East Division Star of the Month for January 2021.
  •  Done — GhostRiver 17:08, 29 October 2021 (UTC)

Couple more things

• The sentence about the "kid line" is kind of a run-on. As well, you should take out which because it doesn't make sense with the sentence.
  •  Fixed How does it look now?
• Can you please add a hyphen in hat trick to bypass the redirect?
  •  Done
• For the Athletic sources that are hidden behind a paywall, please follow Template:Closed access
  •  Done Used "url-access=subscription", as recommended by the template
• Why do you need two different sources (one in the body and one in the chart) for the Hockey East All-Rookie Team? Can you not use the same one?
  •  Fixed
• Can you please change Calder Trophy to Calder Memorial Trophy to bypass the redirect?
  •  Fixed
• Please WL the first mention of The Morning Call in work
  •  Done

GhostRiver, this should do it . HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 00:00, 30 October 2021 (UTC)

HickoryOughtShirt?4 All done! Thanks for taking look at such a large article! — GhostRiver 00:11, 30 October 2021 (UTC)

GhostRiver, the longer it is, the more fun it is! I am passing this, well done. HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 00:15, 30 October 2021 (UTC)