Talk:Japanese angelshark/GA1
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Reviewer: FunkMonk (talk · contribs) 14:23, 18 June 2013 (UTC)
- Hi, I will review this article. FunkMonk (talk) 14:23, 18 June 2013 (UTC)
- "is a species of angel shark, family Squatinidae" Seems jargony, add "of the family Squatinidae"?
- I don't like using the "of the family" here because that makes it sound like "Squatinidae" is a category within "angel shark", rather than that they're synonymous.
- Is there perhaps another, less formal, way to phrase it? FunkMonk (talk) 15:44, 18 June 2013 (UTC)
- Well, I prefer to have "family Squatinidae" in the intro (since I refer to the family elsewhere in the article), and I don't think the 'noun, synonym,' construction is all that unusual? -- Yzx (talk) 15:52, 18 June 2013 (UTC)
- Is there perhaps another, less formal, way to phrase it? FunkMonk (talk) 15:44, 18 June 2013 (UTC)
- "Japanese angelshark diverged from the rest of the Asian angelshark lineage" Japanese angelshark lineage perhaps? The species hardly remained unchanged for 100 million years.
- Changed.
- "It is a bottom-dwelling shark found over sand" Sounds a bit odd, can it be rephrased? Inhabiting sand covered ocean floors, or soem such?
- Changed to "found in sandy habitats"
- "Litters of two to ten pups" isn't the word "pup" reserved for mammals?
- Newborn sharks and rays have always been called pups, as far as I know.
- Alright. FunkMonk (talk) 15:44, 18 June 2013 (UTC)
Let me know of further issues. -- Yzx (talk) 15:33, 18 June 2013 (UTC)
- Alright, not any more to add, nice images, sources and all, so I'll pass. FunkMonk (talk) 15:54, 18 June 2013 (UTC)
- Thanks for the review. -- Yzx (talk) 15:57, 18 June 2013 (UTC)