Talk:Japanese cruiser Sakawa/GA1
Latest comment: 6 years ago by Krishna Chaitanya Velaga in topic GA Review
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Reviewer: Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk · contribs) 15:49, 7 February 2018 (UTC)
Will take this one. Regards, Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk • mail) 15:49, 7 February 2018 (UTC)
- Lead and infobox;
- A comma (,) after "After the war"
- to be expended
in"for" nuclear weapon tests - 1939
Fiscal Year; not necessary, more over fiscal years vary from country to country
- Section 1;
- Looks good, consistency maintained, all the parameters—Displacement, Length, Beam, Draft, Power, Propulsion, Speed, Armament and armor—seem fine. Conversion templates and links are in right place.
- and one aft; add wiktionary link to "aft"
- Section 2;
- I am bit confused with the last lines of the first paragraph; "the squadron was assigned to Operation Ten-Go" "originally scheduled to accompany the battleship Yamato with her sister ship Yahagi" "no fuel available for them to participate in the mission". I am unclear whether "the squadron was on low fuel, and so they were sent to the Ten-Go, instead of accompanying the battleships" or "As the battleships were on low fuel, this squadron was sent in their place"? Please make the clearer.
- See how it reads now.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 01:20, 18 February 2018 (UTC)
- Red-link "Fanna" if there is no article.
- formally turned over to the United States Navy; See if "handed" sounds better than "turned"
- A comma (,) after "dismal working conditions aboard"
- The second weapons test, Baker; is "Baker" the test's name? Why is it in italics?
- I am bit confused with the last lines of the first paragraph; "the squadron was assigned to Operation Ten-Go" "originally scheduled to accompany the battleship Yamato with her sister ship Yahagi" "no fuel available for them to participate in the mission". I am unclear whether "the squadron was on low fuel, and so they were sent to the Ten-Go, instead of accompanying the battleships" or "As the battleships were on low fuel, this squadron was sent in their place"? Please make the clearer.
- Note 10; Make it "Tully 2016" for consistency
- Why? No other refs use a date, nor is there any other source that it could be confused with.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 01:20, 18 February 2018 (UTC)
- Copyright violation unlikely
- All images OK.
- Nice work. Regards, Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk • mail) 14:00, 16 February 2018 (UTC)
- Thanks to User:Yexstorm2001, most of these have already been made.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 01:20, 18 February 2018 (UTC)
- It is reasonably well written.
- It is factually accurate and verifiable.
- a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):
- a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- It follows the neutral point of view policy.
- Fair representation without bias:
- Fair representation without bias:
- It is stable.
- No edit wars, etc.:
- No edit wars, etc.:
- It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- Overall:
- Pass/Fail:
- Regards, Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk • mail) 05:15, 24 February 2018 (UTC)
- Pass/Fail: