Talk:Japanese destroyer Odake/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Hog Farm (talk · contribs) 01:38, 2 August 2020 (UTC)

• Lead's a little short, but since this article has less than 2600 bytes of readable prose, I guess the length fits the article.
• "They had a range of 4,680 nautical miles" - I'm personally still thinking of the best way to handle this. "The ships" wouldn't make a good sentence starter, as it's too similar to a lot of other sentence starters in this paragraph. However, I don't think "They" is an appropriate way to start this sentence, as "they" is referring to the ships, but the subject of the previous sentence is the turbines themselves, so "they" would most naturally refer to the turbines in the current setup.
  • I changed the "they" to "The Tachibanas" as you're right that the preceding noun is turbines.
• "They could deliver their 60 depth charges via two stern racks" - Rails instead of racks is used in the infobox. I've always seen rails as the more standard term for depth-charge deployers.
• I'm assuming Odakee is a typo, not an alternate name.
• The URL for Nevitt's combined fleet links to the description of a different ship, Enoki
  • Thanks for catching these. See if my changes are satisfactory.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 18:20, 6 August 2020 (UTC)

That's about it, I think. This is a rather short article, but I see no indication that there's anything further to write about this subject. Hog Farm _Bacon 22:58, 2 August 2020 (UTC)