Talk:Japanese transport ship Unyo Maru No. 2/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Sturmvogel 66 (talk · contribs) 03:28, 7 September 2020 (UTC)

I'll get to this shortly.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 03:28, 7 September 2020 (UTC)

• Starting off with the infobox, don't use citations there as per WP:INFOBOXREF; they're redundant to the cites in the main body.
  • Noting this, I included references for things like the yard number because I did not mention these things in the body. However, I have removed the refs for the characteristics of the ship. Lettler^{hello • contribs} 16:18, 19 September 2020 (UTC)
    • Fair enough.
• Use an endash rather than a hyphen for number ranges like years.
• Since Japan switched to the metric system in the 1920s, you should give metric measurements first.
• What kind of length, between perpendiculars or overall? Miramar gives a figure for between perpendiculars.
• You've mistaken height for draft
  • Still have height in the main body.
• Add the |ship power field to the infobox and move the 1900 bhp measurement there
• Add the number of propeller shafts to the propulsion field.
• In the lede add a link for launched.
• the convoy that Unyo Maru No. 2 was part of was attacked by Dutch Air Force bombers awkward, rephrase. More later.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 02:15, 19 September 2020 (UTC)
  • All of these points have been addressed. Lettler^{hello • contribs} 16:18, 19 September 2020 (UTC)

@Sturmvogel 66: Are you going to continue the review? Lettler^{hello • contribs} 01:33, 28 September 2020 (UTC)

• Link Mitsui Bussan, although its shipbuilding subsidiary Mitsui Engineering & Shipbuilding is probably the actual builder
• immediately embarked for Indochina What does this mean?
• Clarify that the ship was carrying supplies, etc. for the navy
• On 21 December, the main body of the Japanese naval force, including Unyo Maru No. 2, re-armed Don't you mean 22 December? And they didn't re-arm. Leaving some troops behind they got back on the ships and sailed to Kuching.
• Add the coordinates where the ship sank. You can use this code to get it to display properly: {{Coord|19|20|N|125|15|W|display=inline,title}}--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 01:20, 30 September 2020 (UTC)
  • All of these points have been addressed. The coordinates, however, do not work; it gives a position in Kuching town rather than in the sea. I'm almost certain this was a mistake on the part of the authors of the CombinedFleet page. Lettler^{hello • contribs} 15:27, 2 October 2020 (UTC)