Talk:Jared Norris

Latest comment: 7 years ago by WikiOriginal-9 in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 07:43, 21 November 2017 (UTC)Reply


Going to review this. Promise that this will be the last of your articles to be reviewed by me for a while! MWright96 (talk) 07:43, 21 November 2017 (UTC)Reply

  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose):   b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):  
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (reference section):   b (citations to reliable sources):   c (OR):  
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects):   b (focused):  
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:  
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:  
  6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales):   b (appropriate use with suitable captions):  
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:  

Lead

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  • "He played in 42 games, starting 32, during his college career, " - reword to During his college career, Wiliams played in 42 games and started 32 of them.   Done
  • "recorded 269 total tackles, 7.0 sacks, eight pass breakups, four forced fumbles and two fumble recoveries." - wikilink or explain the jargon that is in this piece of text. Also this should start with HE recorded 269 total tackles,   Done

Early years

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  • Valley fever, inside linebacker and middleline backer are redirect links that need attention to.   Done
  • "His junior year," - In his junior year,   Done
  • "He garnered Second Team MaxPreps Division I All-State" - Norris earned   Done
  • Spell out MVP and wikilink it   Done
  • "He won the Hometown All-Stars Linebacker Award for the second year in a row." - better Norris won the Hometown All-Stars Linebacker Award for the second consecutive year.   Done
  • "Norris committed to Utah in May 2010." - write out a little more so it reads as follows Norris committed to playing college football for Utah in May 2010.   Done

College career

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  • The following are redirect links: mac linebacker, rover linebacker, Pac-12, the Bednarik Award and the Lott IMPACT Trophy.   Done
  • Added a wikilink to the first mention of fumble and bachelor's degree   Done
  • "He played in ten games, starting seven, in 2013." - He played in ten games, and started seven of them in 2013.   Done
  • "He missed two games due to injury." - is there anything to explain what type of injury Norris sustained?
All I found was "The Utes were without corner Davion Orphey and linebacker Jared Norris, who remained in Salt Lake City due to injuries. Norris also sat out the Oregon game." WikiOriginal-9 (talk) 03:58, 23 November 2017 (UTC)Reply
  • "In July 2015," - change to Three months later   Done
  • "He played in 42 games, starting 32, during his college career." - Throughout his colleg career, Norris played in 42 games and started 32 of them.   Done

Professional career

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  • "recording 3 solo tackles and 3 tackle assists" - spell out three per MOS:NUMERAL   Done

Personal life

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  • Please don't use Norris' first name.   Done

That is all the issues I could find during my reading of this article. On hold. MWright96 (talk) 09:14, 21 November 2017 (UTC)Reply

@WikiOriginal-9: Thanks for addressing the issues I've raised. I'll accept the view you cannot a source that states the specific type of injury Norris sustained. This article can now be given the GA symbol. MWright96 (talk) 06:56, 23 November 2017 (UTC)Reply
Thanks for the review. WikiOriginal-9 (talk) 06:59, 23 November 2017 (UTC)Reply