Talk:Jazz kissa/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: 100cellsman (talk · contribs) 22:00, 15 November 2022 (UTC)

• "Some cafés employed waitresses offering sexual services who would sing and dance to the phonograph" change to "some cafe cafés employed waitresses who offered sexual services and would sing and dance to the phonograph".

• "They catered to young patrons, often men who could not afford to purchase the music themselves, and were staff by female waitresses" change to "These were also staffed by female waitresses, and catered to young patrons, often men who could not afford to purchase the music themselves".

• Change "Second World War" to "World War II" and link to that article.

• "being some of the only places to hear the latest jazz music" change "being" to "to become".

That's all I have to say! 웃OO 22:36, 15 November 2022 (UTC)

@100cellsman thanks! I've made these changes! Vladimir.copic (talk) 01:51, 16 November 2022 (UTC)