Talk:Jenna Ortega/GA1
GA Review
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Reviewer: Kj cheetham (talk · contribs) 20:55, 17 March 2024 (UTC)
I'll make a start on this this week. I'll ping when I've done a first pass. -Kj cheetham (talk) 20:55, 17 March 2024 (UTC)
- It is reasonably well written.
- It is factually accurate and verifiable.
- a (reference section): b (inline citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):
- Has a refs section, which looks fine. Earwig copyvio checker says 29.1%, but looking more closely that's almost all due to quotes.
- a (reference section): b (inline citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- Major aspects covered, and is on-topic.
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- It follows the neutral point of view policy.
- Fair representation without bias:
- No obvious bias.
- Fair representation without bias:
- It is stable.
- No edit wars, etc.:
- Article is relatively stable.
- No edit wars, etc.:
- It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- Images are all relevant, with suitable captions, though just "Ortega in 20xx" may be slightly too brief. (No alt text, but that's not required for GA.) Images all claim to have a Creative Commons license.
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- Overall:
- Pass/Fail:
- Pass/Fail:
Early life
edit- "Ortega stated rejections motivated her" to "Ortega stated that rejections motivated her"
- Done
Lead
edit- Oxford comma suggested before the "and" in "for which she received nominations at the Golden Globe, Primetime Emmy and Screen Actors Guild Awards"
- Done
2012–2017
edit2018–2021
edit- "Ortega led the high-school drama film" needs clarifying I think.
- Could you clarify on what needs clarifying??
- Question: Led in what way, as in directed/produced/lead cast member, etc. -Kj cheetham (talk) 13:20, 23 March 2024 (UTC)
- Revised
- Question: Led in what way, as in directed/produced/lead cast member, etc. -Kj cheetham (talk) 13:20, 23 March 2024 (UTC)
- Could you clarify on what needs clarifying??
2022–present
edit- Oxford comma suggested before the "and" in "style of speaking and facial expressions"
- Done
- Is "the" needed in "episode of the NBC's sketch comedy series"?
Upcoming projects
edit- Change "Ortega is set to star" to "Ortega is set to star in"
- Done
- Needs a comma after "a dark comedy co-starring Paul Rudd"
- Done
- Is "attached" the right word in "Ortega is attached to star in Alba"?
- I believe it's correct, but probably not the most encyclopaedic, so I've replaced it
Influences
edit- "She also admired Fanning's sister Elle and followed both of their careers as a child." should have commas either side of "Elle".
- Done
Role choices
edit- "more-varied" doesn't need a hyphen.
- Change "in 2021 she did not want" to "in 2021 that she did not want".
- Done
Personal life
editGeneral
editThere's a few instances of quotes following a colon where I'd have used a comma.
- I believe that's just a matter of style and is grammatically correct. Pamzeis (talk) 01:06, 19 March 2024 (UTC)
- I'd agree with that. -Kj cheetham (talk) 13:18, 23 March 2024 (UTC)
I do want to note these are all minor, and not essential to achieve GA. -Kj cheetham (talk) 19:44, 18 March 2024 (UTC)
Sourcing check
editGlancing at the sources they look okay overall. Sampling 24 randomly (which I think is more than enough):
- 13 - interview, but that's fine
- 18 - this is for Iron Man 3 - but is it your interpretion of it that it's "successful at the box office"? (I personally agree it was successful though, and ref 20 backs it up.)
- I've removed this bit entirely, as it's not really relevant to Ortega's career
- 23 - ok
- 25 - ok
- 29 - ok
- 33 - ok
- 45 - ok
- 48 - is "craves more independence from her parents" enough to say "stubborn" in the article?
- It does say that she's wilful, which essentially means she's stubborn, according to dictionary.com
- 52 - ok
- 75 - ok
- 80 - ok
- 94 - ok
- 95 - ok
- 103 - ok
- 110 - ok
- 120 - self-published by Ty Burr, but I think that's ok in this case.
- 129 - ok
- 180 - ok
- 181 - ok
- 194 - ok
- 197 - ok
- 200 - ok
- 202 - ok
- 210 - ok
Pamzeis, All my comments are very minor really, so I have to say well done for this overall! I've give you chance to respond to things before, but I think it's almost ready to be marked as GA. -Kj cheetham (talk) 13:44, 23 March 2024 (UTC)
- @Kj cheetham: Thanks for your comments :) I've responded to the above. Pamzeis (talk) 14:48, 23 March 2024 (UTC)
- All good to me now, good work! -Kj cheetham (talk) 14:51, 23 March 2024 (UTC)