Talk:Jennie Snyder Urman

Latest comment: 2 years ago by 82.37.139.114 in topic A user adding arabic remakes

Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment

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  This article is or was the subject of a Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment. Further details are available on the course page. Student editor(s): Cheekoleeno. Peer reviewers: CCYeeBo, Ewenstruemental.

Above undated message substituted from Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org assignment by PrimeBOT (talk) 23:21, 17 January 2022 (UTC)Reply

Peer Review

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Hi! I think you wrote a great first draft! I copyedited some minor things, like misspelling and dropping a couple little words, but you can undo them if you think they were unnecessary. Regarding misspelling, some quotes have Jennie as "Jenny" (I didn't fix them because I assumed the writers of the articles misspelled her name, but just making a note to make sure). In the first paragraph of Career, I feel maybe you can cite "On September 10, 2001, Jennie Snyder Urman and her friend, Victoria Webster embarked on a new journey as they left New York City for Los Angeles to pursue writing in the realm of television." (I know it may seem excessive, but better safe than sorry?). Also, in the second paragraph of Career, "Moreover, for those unfamiliar with the hierarchy, it is as follows: writer’s assistant, staff writer, story editor, executive story editor, co-producer, supervising producer, co-executive producer, executive producer, and lastly, showrunner." It sounds like it could be a quote, or that your 'talking' to us, so I suggest maybe rewording it a bit so that it sounds a bit more like a usual Wiki article. I like that you incorporated quotes into the article. However, the quote (style?) in the second paragraph in the introduction, was a bit unclear "According to Urman, she is questioned often about her “work-life balance…[which] strikes me as sort of funny...". Was the "work-life balance" part in the quote itself? I feel like you can start the quote from [which], but I don't know your sources, so I may be overanalyzing it. Overall though, great first draft and I hope I helped in some way! CCYeeBo (talk) 03:07, 9 October 2015 (UTC)Reply

Peer Review 2

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Hi, so first of all I made a few little changes on my own, such as putting in a link for Reign and a couple small spelling errors. There are only a few little things I noticed you may want to change. First of all, when talking about Emily Owens M.D., you used the word skein, and it doesn't make sense in the context of the sentence. Also, the wording is bit awkward on one of the sentences talking about her work on Hope & Faith. I'd recommend changing “in her final year, she became the executive story editor.” to “finally as the executive story editor.” Putting the television filmography box below the subsection on Jane the Virgin might look better, but it's up to you if you want to do that. The article is well written otherwise, good job! Ewenstruemental (talk) 02:41, 13 October 2015 (UTC)Reply

A user adding arabic remakes

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That user is adding Arabic remake on the Jennie Snyder Urman article. I removed it but he keeps bringing it back so there must find a way to stop that user. 82.37.139.114 (talk) 17:39, 6 August 2022 (UTC)Reply