Talk:Jerome Daugherty/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 20:45, 12 September 2019 (UTC)

Comments

• I think if you link "humanities" as a subject, you probably ought to link "rhetoric" as well because many people reading won't really get that.
  • Done. Ergo Sum 12:41, 13 September 2019 (UTC)
• "his leadership of Georgetown University for four years" -> "his four-year leadership of Georgetown University"?
  • Done. Ergo Sum 12:42, 13 September 2019 (UTC)
• "on March 25, 1849 in" comma after 1849.
  • Done. Ergo Sum 12:42, 13 September 2019 (UTC)
• "in Baltimore, Maryland to " comma after Maryland.
  • Done. Ergo Sum 12:42, 13 September 2019 (UTC)
• "Rose a Wivel" really?
  • Done. Typo. Ergo Sum 12:43, 13 September 2019 (UTC)
• "in Frederick, Maryland in" comma after Maryland.
  • Done. Ergo Sum 12:43, 13 September 2019 (UTC)
• "in Washington, D.C. to" I know this sounds boring... comma after D.C.
  • Done. Ergo Sum 12:44, 13 September 2019 (UTC)
• "teaching, now in Latin and Ancient Greek." did he teach in those languages or teach those languages?
  • Rephrased. Ergo Sum 12:45, 13 September 2019 (UTC)
• I know this is subjective, but you link "mathematics" but not "theology", and I would think the former is more well-known than the latter...
  • Linked theology. Ergo Sum 12:45, 13 September 2019 (UTC)
• "tertianship" technical term, does it have a suitable link?
  • The most suitable link would be Jesuit formation, which is linked a few words later. Ergo Sum 12:46, 13 September 2019 (UTC)
• "of treasurer and professor of mathematics" I know it's unlikely, but reversing those would mean no-one could get confused about a possible position of "treasure of mathematics"...
  • Done. Ergo Sum 12:46, 13 September 2019 (UTC)
• " in Worcester, Massachusetts as" comma after Mass.
  • Done. Ergo Sum 12:46, 13 September 2019 (UTC)
• "Succeeding John D. Whitney..." the whole para goes without mentioning Daugherty by name, a rule of thumb for me is to mention (in a bio) the name on either first or second possibility (but mixing it up from para to para...).
  • Fixed. Ergo Sum 12:48, 13 September 2019 (UTC)
• "of the Dental School" is that the formal name, it doesn't appear to be, so I'm not sure about capitalising it...
  • Rephrased. Ergo Sum 12:47, 13 September 2019 (UTC)
• "opened in Washington, D.C. in " comma after D.C.
  • Done. Ergo Sum 12:48, 13 September 2019 (UTC)
• "detracting from those of Catholic University resulted in the" I think this needs work, I can't quite parse it, a new sentence needed in there perhaps?
  • Rephrased. Should be clearer. Ergo Sum 12:50, 13 September 2019 (UTC)
• What is operarius?
  • Added an explanation. Ergo Sum 12:59, 13 September 2019 (UTC)

Mainly niff-naff and trivia, so I'll put it on hold while we cover those off, but as always, a good piece of work. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 11:38, 13 September 2019 (UTC)

• @The Rambling Man: Thank you for the review. I believe I've addressed all your concerns. Ergo Sum 13:00, 13 September 2019 (UTC)

No problem. Looks good to me, so I'm happy to pass. Cheers, The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 14:40, 13 September 2019 (UTC)

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