Talk:Jesse Jagz/GA1

Latest comment: 4 years ago by Alanna the Brave in topic GA Review

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Reviewer: Alanna the Brave (talk · contribs) 20:20, 13 October 2020 (UTC)Reply


Hello! I'll be reviewing your article. Comments to come over the next few days. Alanna the Brave (talk) 20:20, 13 October 2020 (UTC)Reply

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Criteria: 1a. prose ( ) 1b. MoS ( ) 2a. ref layout ( ) 2b. cites WP:RS ( ) 2c. no WP:OR ( ) 2d. no WP:CV ( )
3a. broadness ( ) 3b. focus ( ) 4. neutral ( ) 5. stable ( ) 6a. free or tagged images ( ) 6b. pics relevant ( )
Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked   are unassessed
All right -- I've made some copy edits, and the prose/layout is looking solid. Content is neutral and generally stable. No images. I spot checked several sources, and I was satisfied with overall paraphrasing quality, but Earwig's copy vio detector has flagged 3 websites: I've confirmed one is definitely a copy of Wikipedia (now tagged on talk page), and the other two are likely the same (although they don't have clear dates to prove it). If this becomes the only issue left, the handful of offending sentences can be re-paraphrased. However, here are the other things that still need to be addressed:
  • Early life and career beginnings: Adaga's birth date appears to be incorrect, according to citation. Is his date of birth August 10th or August 29th? Please confirm either way.
  • Early life and career beginnings: when and why did Adaga begin using the stage name Jesse Jagz? The article switches to the new name suddenly and without explanation.
  • 2010-2013: when did Jagz first sign on with Chocolate City? We hear about his departure but not his original entry.
  • 2015-present: Who is Jan Boer, and why are they important enough to be mentioned in connection to Jagz's album cover art?
  • 2015-present: what was the critical reception of Odysseus?
  • Songs produced by Jesse Jagz: this list is clearly not complete, as the article mentions a number of other artists that Jagz has produced music for. I think listing all of Jagz's individual producing credits would probably take up way too much space (and is not really core information), so unless you have a compelling argument for keeping it, I recommend deleting this list.

Pinging DannyMusicEditor, to see if he can help out. Alanna the Brave (talk) 02:40, 25 October 2020 (UTC)Reply

Update: the nominator is not currently active on Wikipedia, and the issues are still standing after seven days, so I'll have to fail this nomination. However, if the original nominator (or any other editor) is still interested in bringing this up to GA status, I encourage them to address the issues above and re-nominate. Please use Earwig's Copyvio Tool to catch any further article copies. Best, Alanna the Brave (talk) 17:21, 1 November 2020 (UTC)Reply