Talk:Jesus College Boat Club (Oxford)/GA1

GA Review

I plan on reviewing this article. Oh yes. The Rambling Man (talk) 17:31, 12 September 2008 (UTC)

Comments

• So, you have "the Isis" in the lead and "The Isis" in the infobox - the article about that part of the river seems to be The Isis - just a minor point on consistency.
  • Well, I was starting a sentence fragment with a capital letter... have reworded
• Can you, in the infobox, have Official website instead of just http://home.jesus.ox.ac.uk/soc/jcbc/ ?
  • Yes
• Is Barney the most prominent rower to appear for JCBC?
  • The only one with an article about him as a rower, anyway, but no source says he's the most prominent / the only Olympian.
• Last sentence of the lead feels a little orphaned...
  • Expanded
• "..references to the college..." - do you mean references to the boat club? I'm not sure you should use the two phrases interchangeably for fear of ostracising non-Oxbridgrians.
  • Well, for that first one, the references are to a boat from the college rather than a formally-constituted club. I don't think that using place and club interchangeably is too confusing in the context of an article about the club e.g. football articles such as Ipswich Town F.C. (to pick a team at random!) will refer to Ipswich and the reader knows that the club is being referred to, unless the context appears otherwise. I've changed many of them, though.
• "which was a race between an eight from Jesus College and an eight from Brasenose College" - "a race between eights from Jesus College and Brasenose College" might be more efficient?
  • Indeed
• "There were few rowers at this time and races between fours (boats with four oarsmen and a coxswain) attracted more interest than races between eights at this time." - "at this time" x 2...
  • Zapped
• Probably could do better than repeating Tam o'shanters in such quick succession.
  • Indeed
• It may not be clear to the non-expert that a bump would require the bumped boat to concede the race?
  • Sentence added
• Torpids, Eton and bump is linked twice in the History section.
  • No more
• "division of Eights" - this is the first time Eights has been capitalised - why?
  • Changed to Eights Week - the competition is usually known as Eights, taking place in Eights Week, in which eights race each other.
• Perhaps my 'tab-like ignorance (I didn't read English...), but is "vieing" English? "vying" seems to crop up more frequently...
  • Whoops
• You've linked shilling and pence, I'd link £ too for non-Brits.
  • Linked

A great article. All these are virtually trivial. Fix 'em (or discuss 'em with me) and I'll GA-it. The Rambling Man (talk) 19:20, 12 September 2008 (UTC)

• • Thanks! Bencherlite^Talk 09:21, 13 September 2008 (UTC)
    • Great work. Promoting now. The Rambling Man (talk) 17:07, 14 September 2008 (UTC)