Talk:Jethro Sumner

GA Review

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Reviewer: Dank (talk · contribs) 02:16, 26 June 2013 (UTC)

Review

• The toolbox checks out.
• I recommend replacing "Sumner" with "he" throughout, if "he" wouldn't be ambiguous in paragraphs where you've already mentioned Sumner once and where "he" wouldn't be ambiguous.

• Done - Although my definition of ambiguous might be different than yours.

• "William Smallwood a Continental Army general": William Smallwood, a Continental Army general

• Done

• "long arms": Either link to long gun or say what kind of long arms they were.

• Done - changed to "guns".

• "After the death of General Francis Nash, then in command of the North Carolina Brigade, at Germantown,": After the death at Germantown of General ...

• Done

• "Assemby": sp

• Done.

• "resigned after Brandywine due to charges of cowardice that had been leveled against him": I believe WP:Checklist#because is relevant here. "resigned after charges of cowardice were leveled against him". Per WP:Checklist#chronology, I believe most readers will assume this came after Brandywine ... but if the charges first came during Brandywine, it would be fine to say that.

• Done - Took your suggestion

• "to urge for Sumner's promotion": "to lobby for Sumner's promotion" or "to urge them to promote Sumner" would work

• Done - "to nominate Sumner for promotion" is more accurate

• "Due to his leave of absence, Sumner was not present at the Siege of Savannah in September and October 1779, which was a disaster for the Continental Army.": Sumner was on a leave of absence in September and October 1779 during the Siege of Savannah, which was a disaster for the Continental Army.

• Done

• "decimated": This is a "skunked" word, that is, a word made useless because people insist on using it to mean completely different things (reduced by a tenth vs. annihilated)

• Done - I even know that word is incorrect in usage of the sort, but it instinctively comes out when I'm writing.

• "that State" (x2): the state

• Done - that's my attorney designatory language coming out, where every pronoun has to be replaced by a reflexive pronoun or demonstrative adjective, so that the meaning is clear.

• "once again fallen ill, began to slack off": "slack off" is informal, and was he really slacking off? Would it be enough to say that he failed to report to Greene for several months at a time?

• Done - removed the slacking off portion. Don't know why that was used. That was toward the end of my marathon improvement session, I must have been tired.

• "Post-war, death, and legacy": "post-war" (or postwar) is an adjective according to the usual dictionaries, not an adverb or noun

• Done

• "a monument that was part of a plan to create a": Would "a monument intended as a ..." or "a monument designed as a ..." work?

• Done - "A monument designed as..."

• Otherwise:

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

   - Dank (push to talk) 04:13, 26 June 2013 (UTC)

Thanks for your review, @Dank:, and for your many constructive edits! Cdtew (talk) 13:25, 26 June 2013 (UTC)

Passed. I can tell you're rapidly getting better at this, which is more than enough compensation for me. - Dank (push to talk) 13:45, 26 June 2013 (UTC)

Sumner image

The image was uploaded to Ancestry by a relative, Jim Sumner. While some sources on Ancestry.com are not reliable, I feel certain this one is, although a second citation (like a picture in a book) would certainly be more preferable. --EditorExtraordinaire (talk) 11:05, 24 August 2015 (UTC)

@♥Golf:: While your efforts are appreciated, that image is wildly inaccurate in a number of ways. The uniform depicted is that of a mid-late 19th century general, with the construction and epaulettes being those that you would find on a Mexican American war uniform. The presence of a beard is also a mid-late 19th century factor. After doing some research, that is a litho of Edwin Vose Sumner from an issue of Harper's Weekly. Cdtew (talk) 23:19, 25 August 2015 (UTC)

Good work, Cdtew. I thought that beard looked a bit suspect myself (more like a Civil War-era or later look). My confidence in what I find on Ancestry is dwindling by the minute! With that in mind, I am also most appreciative of the work of Materialscientist in quickly reverting the image. Lesson learned: I will do more research myself on matters of this sort. --EditorExtraordinaire (talk) 23:40, 25 August 2015 (UTC)

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