Talk:Joan of Leeds/GA1
Latest comment: 5 years ago by Serial Number 54129 in topic GA Review
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Reviewer: Gog the Mild (talk · contribs) 20:07, 18 April 2019 (UTC)
- The titles of several works are not in title case. Eg Burgess and three others.
- Both images need a USPD tag.
- Image captions: should "Melton's Register" and "Register" be in italics?
- "All that is known of her life comes from a marginalia"; "Melton instructed her to return to her priory … Melton wrote" On the surface this seems a contradiction.
- Suggestion only. Personally I would include Note 1 in the main text as a separate sentence at the end of the paragraph.
- It seems odd that the information about Joan de Saxton is split across two paragraphs.
- "the Registra of the Archbishops of York of 1305–1405" Optional: "of" three times in six words; replace the last with 'for'?
- Link "Monty Python".
- Note 2: "small, poor and yet close to the border with Scotland" I am not sure that "yet" adds anything.
- Note 3: "The books would accompany each Archbishop on his peripatetic travels through the Archiepiscopate." Can I suggest that this either be incorporated into the main text (my preference) or given a separate note. To my eye it ties in poorly with the rest of Note 3.
- "as usual poverty seemed to go hand in hand with laxity". Moreover the conditions of life set its stamp upon the character of the ladies" " One of the closing quotes is not needed.
Very good. I enjoyed that. Gog the Mild (talk) 20:07, 18 April 2019 (UTC)
- Lead: "presumed by 21st-century scholars to be bored of her monastic and enclosed life" ; Article: "In 1318, tired of her enclosed life".
- "Believing—or pretending to believe—her to be dead, and being deceived by the dummy". Insert 'perhaps' after "and" or something similar.
- "which she was unable to do in orders". "orders" links to the surname. :-)
- "where she lived with a man" is in the lead, but doesn't feature in the article.
Gog the Mild (talk) 16:59, 19 April 2019 (UTC)
- Right, added some indecency to go with your cocoa :) ——SerialNumber54129 18:08, 19 April 2019 (UTC)
- Oh good, we do like a bit of indecency. Nice job; passing as GA. But could you just check whether the section header "Escape from the nunneryde" is a typo. Cheers. Gog the Mild (talk) 18:41, 19 April 2019 (UTC)
- Cheers! (And done that, well spotted...) ——SerialNumber54129 18:54, 19 April 2019 (UTC)
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