Talk:Joe Perry (American football)/GA1

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Reviewer: BlackJack (talk · contribs) 12:06, 20 November 2016 (UTC)

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I'll do this one. Will start soon. Jack | ^{talk page} 12:06, 20 November 2016 (UTC)

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After Y. A. Tittle, this is another very good article. As Joe Perry was one of the early black stars in pro football, it didn't surprise me to read that he was confronted by racism and it is good that he was able to overcome the stupid attitudes of certain people and achieve success.

Just one problem with the article. We will need a citation in the "Other ventures and later life" to support the statement by John York. This needs to be placed after the colon introducing the statement. With that in place, I will be able to pass the article. Very well done. Jack | ^{talk page} 19:24, 25 November 2016 (UTC)

@BlackJack: Cited. Hadn't even noticed you reviewed it. I had actually hoped you'd save this one for last, as there was some things I wasn't too confident about. Such as the funky opening sentence and my overloading on obituaries (since obituaries tend to soften reality). But eh, easy fixes for later. Thanks for the review. Lizard (talk) 19:49, 30 November 2016 (UTC)

The wording is fine and the obits are reliable sources so no problems. Thanks for doing the citation. This passes now and I'll look at McElhenny next. Well done. Jack | ^{talk page} 12:00, 1 December 2016 (UTC)