Talk:Joey Hamilton/GA2

Latest comment: 15 years ago by Giants27 in topic GA Review

GA Review

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I'll be reading through this article, and within the next day or two, will post the review here. JamieS93 13:04, 4 July 2009 (UTC)Reply

GA review (see here for criteria)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose):   b (MoS):  
    I did some copyediting and minor cleanup.
    • He was then called up for the second straight season to the Wichita Wranglers - I've seen similar terminology in sports-related articles (being "called up to the roster"), but "second straight season with the Wichita Wranglers", or something similar, might flow better.
    • With the Padres in 1998, which turned out to be Hamilton's last in San Diego, he had a 13-13 record, 4.27 ERA in 34 starts and 217.1 innings pitched - Hamilton's last what?
    • Around the 1998 trade deadline there was a rumored trade that would send Pete Harnisch to San Diego and Hamilton to the Detroit Tigers but the trade never materialized. - I'm confused in the beginning of the sentence, with the trade's deadline being introduced first.
      • Reworded to There was a rumored trade around the 1998 MLB trade deadline that would send Hamilton to the Detroit Tigers but the trade never materialized.--Giants27 (c|s) 21:51, 4 July 2009 (UTC)Reply
    • a started 20 games and came in relief in 22 games - is "relief" a baseball term? Otherwise, it doesn't seem to fit there.
    • with Cincinnati before bouncing around training camps and the minor leagues (from the lead) - something like "transferring" would be better than the colloquial "bouncing".
    • Footnotes 4, 9, 10, 11, and 16 have no publisher info.
    • All sources that are part of a larger publication should be italicized in the refs, or switched from "publisher=" to the "work=" parameter (i.e., newspapers like Los Angeles Times, Houston Chronicle, etc.) Also, Baseball-Reference.com seems to be web-only, so I don't think it should be in italics.
    • If possible, could you link all of the publishers that have articles? Either that, or delink BR.com. If you do link all the publishers, link the first instance only.
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (references):   b (citations to reliable sources):   c (OR):  
    He was granted free agency on October 30, 2002. Is that sourced?
    Sourced it.--Giants27 (c|s) 21:53, 4 July 2009 (UTC)Reply
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects):   b (focused):  
    Looks good enough to me, it seems to follow most/all of his career.
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:  
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars etc.:  
  6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales):   b (appropriate use with suitable captions):  
    No image, but that's fine.
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:  
    This is a nice article and a near-complete work. I have placed it on hold and look forward to passing it once the above issues are addressed. Good luck. :-) JamieS93 21:03, 4 July 2009 (UTC)Reply

I took another glance through (the first point is not a big deal), and am passing the article as a GA now. Congratulations! A nice independence day Good Article for ya, enjoy. :-) Best, JamieS93 23:09, 4 July 2009 (UTC)Reply

Thanks, you have a great July 4th, too.--Giants27 (c|s) 23:14, 4 July 2009 (UTC)Reply