Talk:John Albert Taylor/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Nikkimaria (talk) 03:51, 23 October 2010 (UTC)

Hello! I will be reviewing this article for GA status. My review should be posted within the next few days. Cheers, Nikkimaria (talk) 03:51, 23 October 2010 (UTC)

I've decided to list this article as a GA. Consider the below suggestions for further improvement. Cheers, Nikkimaria (talk) 14:05, 23 October 2010 (UTC)

• Thank you, the feedback has been very helpful to the article. KimChee (talk) 19:23, 23 October 2010 (UTC)

Writing and formatting

• "He moved to various locations as a youth" - wording is very vague. Would it be accurate to say he moved frequently during his youth?

 Fixed.

• "her daughter Charla...the head...the mouth" - either change the "the"s to "her", or add "the body of" before "her daughter"

 Done.

• "dropped off Charla" -> "dropped Charla off"

 Done.

• "Taylor arrived from Florida" -> "Taylor had arrived from Florida"

 Done.

• "Taylor shared his pizza with his uncle Gordon Lee while joined by attorney Ed Brass and Catholic priest Reyes Rodriguez" - grammar, and didn't he fire the attorney earlier?

 Fixed.

• Don't wikilink the same terms multiple times, particularly not well-known terms like Florida

 Done.

• "Shortly before midnight, January 26, 1996" - so, was 11:59 or 12:01 January 26? Not clear

 Fixed. Rephrased the section in a more straightforward manner.

Accuracy and verifiability

• Was the dummy gun loaded with a blank or a wax bullet? The two are not the same thing

 Fixed.

Broad

• Was he ever convicted in juvenile court for his earlier crimes in Florida?

The available sources indicate that he was institutionalized, but do not specify a juvenile conviction. KimChee (talk) 19:23, 23 October 2010 (UTC)

• It might be helpful to list his sisters and half-sisters

This is also limited by the information from available sources, but an additional half-sister that was identified in a source has been added to the article. KimChee (talk) 19:23, 23 October 2010 (UTC)

Neutrality

No issues noted

Stability

No issues noted

Images

No issues noted