Talk:John B. Magruder/GA2

Latest comment: 5 years ago by AustralianRupert in topic GA Review

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Reviewer: AustralianRupert (talk · contribs) 03:16, 22 November 2018 (UTC)Reply


I will take a look at this article. Regards, AustralianRupert (talk) 03:16, 22 November 2018 (UTC)Reply

General comments/suggestions: G'day, Money emoji, nice work. I have a few suggestions/comments: AustralianRupert (talk) 03:20, 22 November 2018 (UTC)Reply

  • the infobox says his date of death was "February 19", but the lead and body of the article says "February 18"
  • in the lead recapturing Galveston, Texas the following year --> the year that this followed doesn't seem to have been defined.
  • link furlough
  • They had three children; Isabella (1833 – July 20, 1869); Katherine (1836 – April 26, 1896) Elizabeth; and Henry R. (1841 – January 31, 1907): there appears to be four names here?
  • found the circumstances favoring --> "found the circumstances favorable"?
  • suffered a humiliating defeat: I suggest avoiding the word "humiliating" as it might convey a point of view. Probably best to just to say he was defeated
  • army–the Army of the Potomac–to disembark...: the dashes here should probably be emdashes, not endashes
  • Peninsula–about 13,600 men–was tasked...: same as above
  • Done by Kges.
  • The objectives of Lee–by assuming the offensive–was to : same as above
  • In Paul Octave Hébert, Magruder's predecessor's, tenure Galveston, Texas: this seems a little awkwardly worded. Perhaps this might work: "Magruder's predecessor, Paul Octave Hebert, surrendered Galveston, Texas, on October 9..."?
  • "The third-ranking..." --> "The third highest ranking"?
Changed.💵Money💵emoji💵💸 19:24, 25 November 2018 (UTC)Reply
  • ext links all work, no dab or dup links (no action required)
  • "File:John B Magruder.jpg": needs a US licence

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