Talk:John Paul Jones (musician)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: J04n(talk page) 14:30, 9 January 2011 (UTC)

I will review this article J04n(talk page) 14:30, 9 January 2011 (UTC)

This article needs a lot of work to reach good article status. There are unsourced paragraphs. The references are poorly formatted (many are missing access dates, book references are missing page numbers). I don't see the Allmusic 'influenced by' as sufficient documentation for a good article, I would much rather see a reference that the artist directly states that they were influenced by JPJ. There are numerous dead links in the article, see here. The lead section does not summarize the article, it spends too much space listing instruments and those influenced by him. Too much emphasis is given to a rumor, "Royal Orleans". The whole article can use copy editting. Sorry if I'm being harsh but this nomination was a bit premature. JPJ is a major figure in rock history, I certainly hope that one day the article will be promoted but right now I am failing this nomination. J04n(talk page) 16:12, 11 January 2011 (UTC)