Talk:John Q. Loomis/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Hog Farm (talk · contribs) 01:13, 27 June 2022 (UTC)

• Shiloh is linked twice in the lead, not necessary

• Done

• "when the census recorded him as the well-off owner of real estate valued at $2,000 and the same amount in other assets" - remove "well-off", as its unlikely that census source compares his wealth to others

• Fair, it does stand for itself

• "The night before, the brigade was shifted from Withers' to Cheatham's Division by Leonidas Polk, seeking to simplify the command structure" - not seeing where Cozzens says that Polk order this? Polk is only mentioned as proposing a turning movement and the applicable spot in the source is Withers and Cheatham had agreed to split their commands: Cheatham would direct the movements of Loomis, Manigault, Vaughan, and Maney, while Withers led Donelson, Stewart, Anderson, and Chalmers

• Added ref to Daniel, which provides the detail that Polk was trying to avoid a repeat of the chaos that occurred when brigades were intermixed at Shiloh

• "Cheatham's post-battle report recorded an estimated 75 casualties in Loomis' and Vaughan's brigades" - the phrasing suggests this is for the whole battle, but it's after only the December 30 narrative, so it's not clear if this is one day or the whole battle

• Clarified, it is indeed only for that day

• Images are all properly licensed and from the incomparable Hal Jesperson
• Spot checked the Noe cite, a couple of the Cozzens cite, some of the OR cites, and a few stray ones; only issue noted mentioned above.

Good work here; placing on hold. Hog Farm _Talk 02:45, 28 June 2022 (UTC)