Talk:Jon Lieber/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Bloom6132 (talk · contribs) 15:18, 25 June 2013 (UTC)

I'm going to be reviewing this, either in the next few hours or over the next few days. —Bloom6132 (talk) 15:18, 25 June 2013 (UTC)

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

Comments–

• Y All ref links are working
• Y No copyvio detected
• All dashes separating years, scores and win–loss record should be an en dash (–) rather than an ordinary hyphen (-).
• "He batted left-handed and threw right-handed. He threw a fastball, a slider, and a changeup." – rather than two short sentences, you could amalgamate the two and say "…threw right handed, and utilized a fastball… [for his pitches]" (not sure about the last part; can leave it out if you want)
• "2198.0 innings pitched" – for consistency's sake, remove the 0 at the end, since it isn't utilized elsewhere in the article with whole number IP.
• "he was traded to the Pittsburgh Pirates in 1993" – for variation, why not "…he was traded to the Pittsburgh Pirates the following season"
• "He debuted in 1994" – sounds better if "He made his debut in 1994"
• "Pirates' manager Jim Leyland named Lieber the teams' Opening Day" – should be "team's", since it applies to only one team.
• "Lieber had a ×–y record" – it's written the same every time. For variation, you could use "compiled", "posted" or "recorded" (last word: only if it isn't followed directly by the W–L record).
• "On May 24, he one-hit the Cincinnati Reds, 3-0, ending the team's NL-record streak of 208 games in a row without being shut out, throwing just 78 pitches." – any source(s)? (especially for the NL record).
• In order to maintain consistency of date formats, the DOB of his children should be M DD, YYYY.
• For MLB sources (MLB.com, Cubs.MLB.com), the work should be MLB.com, while the publisher should be MLB Advanced Media.
• For Baseball Reference sources, the publisher should be Sports Reference LLC.
• For ESPN source (#71), ESPN Internet Ventures should be listed as the publisher (per FL 30–30 club)

I'm placing this on hold for now while issues get addressed. —Bloom6132 (talk) 16:54, 25 June 2013 (UTC)

All my comments have been addressed. Everything looks good to go – passing the article. —Bloom6132 (talk) 08:17, 27 June 2013 (UTC)