Talk:Jonah/GA1

Latest comment: 6 years ago by Katolophyromai in topic Prose Suggestions

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Reviewer: Iazyges (talk · contribs) 18:37, 25 January 2018 (UTC)Reply

Will start soon. Iazyges Consermonor Opus meum 18:37, 25 January 2018 (UTC)Reply

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GA Criteria

GA Criteria:

  • 1
    1.a  Y
    1.b  Y
  • 2
    2.a  Y
    2.b  Y
    2.c  Y
    2.d  Y (27.5%, but this is only because one paragraph is cited directly from bible in both article and source.)
  • 3
    3.a  Y
    3.b  Y
  • 4
    4.a  Y
  • 5
    5.a  Y
  • 6
    6.a  Y
    6.b  Y
  • No DAB links  Y
  • No Dead links  Y
  • Images appropriately licensed  Y

Prose Suggestions

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  • Yahweh commands the fish to vomit Jonah out. suggest Yahweh then commands the fish to vomit Jonah out..
  • Yahweh again commands Jonah to visit Nineveh and prophesy to its inhabitants. suggest Yahweh again commands Jonah to travel to Nineveh and prophesy to its inhabitants.
  • which decrees fasting, sackcloth, prayer, and repentance. suggest which decrees fasting, the wearing of sackcloth, prayer, and repentance.
  • Even the king comes off his throne to repent. suggest removal; the king previously ordered the people to repent, whereas this makes it seem like he was the last to repent.
  • and demands for Yahweh to kill him unless this is directly in the source, id suggest pleads, as it seemed more of the tone to me.
  • it exaggerates the size of the city of Nineveh to an implausible degree[1][17] and incorrectly refers to the administrator of the city as a "king". you can remove the citation after implausible degree, as they share the same citation as the end of the sentence.
I am going to leave the citations, since the statement may be controversial to some and, without the citations, people might challenge it. --Katolophyromai (talk) 17:34, 30 January 2018 (UTC)Reply

Also please fix ref#46, it's currently Ziolkowsi 2007 instead of Ziolkowski 2007. -- Iazyges Consermonor Opus meum 15:09, 30 January 2018 (UTC)Reply

Finnusertop has already taken care of this criticism. --Katolophyromai (talk) 17:51, 30 January 2018 (UTC)Reply
  • Non-reviewer comment: Katolophyromai, please address what is (in References) "Walton, Armerding & Walker 2005" but "Walton, Armerding & Walker 1985" under Bibliography. The ISBN points to a 1985 edition, but the linked Google Books edition is from 2017 and with an entirely different ISBN (ISBN 978-0-310-53196-8). What edition the page numbers are from, I have no idea. – Finnusertop (talkcontribs) 16:09, 30 January 2018 (UTC)Reply
I have now fixed the reference. --Katolophyromai (talk) 21:20, 30 January 2018 (UTC)Reply