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  • Nationality should be "American"

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Early life

  • in my opinion the section could be names just "Life", because he's still in his early life, but that's a question of taste
    • I guess my feeling is that this section was about his pre-CPAC speech career, that's why I called it early life. I don't think "Life" is the ideal name because, obviously, the speech and post-speech career are part of his life too. lol. Can you think of any other alternative title besides Early Life? — Hunter Kahn 16:01, 3 January 2010 (UTC)Reply
  • the section could mention that he is an only kid, home-schooled since sixth grade and has experience as an actor in Christian Youth Theater, which is in the NYT source; that makes, among other things, the Arabic language stuff and the performance more understandable
  • the NYT source doesn't say he was raised in the suburbs, just that he lives there
  • the Huffingtonpost source text doesn't contain the mention of his appearance on "The Life Connection Show" and neither does the audio recording - perhaps the Madison Journal source is meant?
  • the NYT source indicates he still studies Arabic so it's not in the past
    • Are you saying this because I used the word "studied" instead of "studies"? That's just the tense that's used throughout, which I thought was proper. Wouldn't it be inconsistent for me to say "studies Arabic"?
  • what does his website reference in the sentence about "Atlanta's Most Talented Child"? it seems completely sourced by HuffPo
  • both the NYT and Krohn on Air America say he began becoming interested in politics aged eight, not nine, and it's not mentioned that he watched coverage, only heard about it (per NYT) and listened to conservative radio (per AA interview)
    • Yeah, the nine thing seems to just be an error on my part. I fixed it, and dropped the AA interview (as per below) because the NYT source covers it..
  • using the AA interview to source is imo a little problematic in that it's a primary source and a lot the info is in published third party sources
    • I've cut the interview for everything except the fact that DeMint is one of his heroes, as I don't think that info is available anywhere else. Not the most crucial of facts though so if you think it has to be cut, I'll cut it. What do you think? — Hunter Kahn 16:01, 3 January 2010 (UTC)Reply
  • The Atlanta Journal-Constitution doesn't say his book was written "in part a response to criticism" - there is no qualification like this there, so if there needs to be one, another source should be added for it
    • The source says "In the book, he attempted to define conservatism after he heard so many decrying McCain’s conservative credentials." I think the wording "in part a response to criticism" reflects this, but if you think it needs to be reworded, what would you suggest I change it to? — Hunter Kahn 16:01, 3 January 2010 (UTC)Reply
  • second book: "focus in part on" is not in the source, only "have more on", which doesn't say a lot about whether they'll be central to the book, but that's a minor point
    • Well, since the source doesn't say how central they will be to the book, I felt like the "focus in part on" wording was sufficient neutral to cover our bases. I can't say definitively from that story that it will be covered a lot or a little, but I can say they will be focused in part on because no matter to what degree they are discussed, it will be part of the book. Do you know what I mean? If you still object, I'm not sure what I could change it to without dropping it altogether, which I guess I could do. (I can't say "It will be about Alexander Hamilton and James Monroe", because that makes it sound like the whole book is about them). Any suggestions? — Hunter Kahn 16:01, 3 January 2010 (UTC)Reply

2009 CPAC speech

Post-speech career

References

External links

  • TPM has a questionable claim for hosting C-SPAN material, so I'm not sure linking to it is fine, perhaps the C-SPAN original can be found? I couldn't locate it on the fly

Categories

  • his Baptism should be sourced in the article, the NYT is a possibility, and he could also be mentioned to be a Jewish Christian and one can probably use Category:Maternal Jews
    • I've added a bit to the article to reflect his Baptism and that he is a Jewish Christian. I think it's OK but take a look. I've also added the category.
  • a French article doesn't exist, so no need to have a link to it
  • Persondata need to be added

Only a note: I think the article culd probably be expanded with info in the RS mentioned in http://www.defineconservatism.com/index.php/in-the-press and, if Fox News is used, the other videos under http://www.foxnews.com/search-results/search?q=krohn&content=Video

I'll put the article on hold. Hekerui (talk) 17:09, 2 January 2010 (UTC)Reply

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