Talk:Joralemon Street Tunnel/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 19:47, 10 March 2021 (UTC)

Comments

• "pair of tubes" is there a link for this? It just struck me as strange phrasing.
  • Technically this is two tunnels, one each for Manhattan and Brooklyn-bound trains. However, they're almost always referred to as a singular pair. Epicgenius (talk) 21:17, 11 March 2021 (UTC)
• "first subway line" overlinked in the lead.
  •  Removed
• "The tubes were ... The tubes are..." mildly repetitive.
  •  Fixed
• "The tunnels had an outside diameter ' has it changed since construction?
  •  Fixed It has not. Epicgenius (talk) 21:17, 11 March 2021 (UTC)
• "by William Barclay Parsons, chief" overlinked.
  •  Removed
• "in lower Manhattan to" ditto.
  •  Removed
• "south to South Ferry, and then to Brooklyn." and those.
  •  Removed
• "the East River, then" and that.
  •  Removed
• "cost $9 million" inflate?
  •  Done
• "blowout" what's that in this context?
  •  Added
• "Parsons cast blame on the" blamed?
  •  Fixed
• "Borough Hall.[13][59][1] ' order.
  •  Done
• "terminus at 242nd Street or " overlinked.
  •  Removed
• "inundated Lower Manhattan. The" ditto.
  •  Removed

Honestly, this is beyond good already. I struggle sometimes to come up with suggestions to improve, so I'm sorry for the bland and disinteresting comments on this one! The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!!!!) 20:30, 11 March 2021 (UTC)

@The Rambling Man: Thanks for the comments. I've resolved all of the issues now. It's really no problem (I think reviewers might be staying away from my articles for the backlog review because they're not problematic enough!). After a while, writing good articles tends to become easier. Epicgenius (talk) 21:17, 11 March 2021 (UTC)

I hear you. Anyway, this is done and dusted, passing, good work as usual. The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!!!!) 21:31, 11 March 2021 (UTC)