Talk:Jorge Chávez
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Tone
editI understand that objectivity must prevail in an encyclopedia project, but the tone of this article seems suspect.
Example 1: "French-Peruvian aviator. Chávez, who was born to Peruvian parents in Paris, spent his childhood not in Peru, but in Europe."
Example 2: "at the city of Issy, in his native France."
Example 3: "Jorge Chávez also became an icon in Peru, where his fame grew after death. The Jorge Chávez International Airport(LIM/SPIM) in Lima is named after him."
To emphasize his European identity belies the fact that virtually no one in Europe knows who he is, whereas everyone in Peru does. Why would this article be written in this manner?Rafajs77 20:45, 25 May 2007 (UTC)
GA review comments
edit- Lead para is way too short
- Is there any information on why his Peruian parents came to France?
- Apart from his educational details in 1908, is there any information on his childhood. Any info on his personality?
- "Afterwards he participated in several aviation competitions throughout France and other European countries." - which competitions?
- "after attaining an altitude of 1,647 meters (5,405 feet)." - what is the significance of 1,647 mts (5,400 ft)
- "The death of Jorge Chávez caused great conmotion in the aviation world." - spell correct to "commotion". Also, what was the commotion - was it safety, risk taking tendency of Chavez? what was the commotion?. please elaborate
- "In Peru, Chávez became an icon for aviation related institutions such as the Air Force." - why? because he was of peruian descent?
- "His remains were initially buried in France but repatriated to Peru in 1957," - why were they repatriated? who requested the repatriation? parents? government? military?
- "For many years, a life-sized replica of Chávez famous Blériot XI monoplane was on display at the air terminal." - does that mean it is not there anymore?
The article is "Start" class article and needs a lot more data before it is bought to GA level. --Kalyan 12:39, 4 July 2007 (UTC)
Well, he did finish it....
editAs far as I read, he suffered the accident that killed him while trying to land in Italy. He sort of finished it. So the sentence "while attempting the first crossing of the Alps" is not very precise.... —Preceding unsigned comment added by 78.50.93.149 (talk) 06:36, 26 September 2010 (UTC)