Talk:Joseph Goebbels/GA1
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Reviewer: Jonas Vinther (talk · contribs) 23:17, 17 June 2015 (UTC)
Will review this right after I get home from work tomorrow. Jonas Vinther • (speak to me!) 23:17, 17 June 2015 (UTC)
- Okay, I'm home. Let's do this! :)
First part
edit- "Paul Joseph Goebbels was born in Rheydt, an industrial town south of Mönchengladbach near Düsseldorf" - mention date Done
- "Both parents" - tweak to "Both of his parents" Done
- "His father Fritz was a clerk in a factory" - tweak to "His father Fritz was a factory clerk" Done
- "his mother Katharina (née Odenhausen)" - shouldn't "née" be written in italics? Done
- "and Maria (1910–1949); the last married the German filmmaker Max W. Kimmich in 1938" - tweak to "and Maria (1910–1949), who married the German filmmaker Max W. Kimmich in 1938" Done
- "Goebbels suffered from ill health during his childhood" - curb "his" Done
- "He had a deformed right foot (clubfoot) which turned inwards" - remove brackets and link clubfoot in deformed right foot bit Done
- "due to a congenital deformity" - link Congenital disorder Done
- "He was educated at a Christian Gymnasium" - write "Goebbels" when it's a new paraprah and also since you used "he" in the previous sentence Done
- "His parents initially hoped that he would become a Catholic priest" - does Manvell & Fraenkel 2010 mention whether Goebbels had any interest in this or what his thoughts about becomming a preist was? If so, seems worth adding Done
- "Perhaps in compensation for his physical disabilities" - this sentence strikes me as very much Wikipedia:VAGUE Fixed
- "He wrote a semi-autobiographical novel, Michael, a three-part work of which only Parts I and III have survived" - what year did he write the book? I see it was published by the NSDAP in 1929, but surely he must written it before that. Right? If not, it seems strange to add a 1929 event in the "Early life" section. Fixed
- "At the University of Heidelberg, he wrote his doctoral thesis on Wilhelm von Schütz" - again, I strongly recommend using "Goebbels" when it's a new paragraph Done
- "and indicated a growing anti-Semitism" - curb the "a" bit Done
- "Goebbels stated the "enchantment [was] ruined". He continued to see her on and off until 1927" - tweak this to "Goebbels stated the "enchantment [was] ruined", but nevertheless continued to see her on and off until 1927" Fixed
- "Hitler was sentenced to prison, and was released on 20 December 1924" - tweak to "Hitler was sentenced to five years in prison, but released on 20 December 1924" Done
- "and was given party badge number 8762" - tweak to "becoming member #8762 Done
- "to a meeting at Bamberg" - tweak to "to a special conference in Bamberg" Done
- "I no longer fully believe in Hitler. That's the terrible thing: my inner support has been taken away" - mention this is a diary quote Done Kershaw does not specifically say this, so I have changed the cite to Longerich.
- "and by 1930 there was a dramatic increase in unemployment" - tweak to "and by 1930 there was a dramatic increase in unemployment and run-away inflation" Not done The inflationary period was in the 1920s, not 1930s. Hyperinflation in the Weimar Republic.
- "with the slogan "the Führer over Germany" - I believe the slogan was "Hitler over Germany" Not done Both Thacker (p.127) and Kershaw (p.227) say "the Führer over Germany".
Second part
editOkay, will take a short break and continue at "Propaganda Minister" when I return. Jonas Vinther • (speak to me!) 14:48, 18 June 2015 (UTC)
- "unless they were on the approved list" - tweak to unless they were approved Fixed
- "On 2 September 1939 (a few days after the start of the war)" - tweak to "On 2 September 1939 (a day after the start of the war)" or something similar Done
- "Albert Speer, Hitler's architect and Minister for Armaments and War Production" - tweak to "Albert Speer, Hitler's architect and later Minister for Armaments and War Production" Done
- "and crucifixes were removed from state buildings" - like Bormann's article, mention Hitler later reversed this policy in a note and use the same source (Rees & Kershaw 2012) Done
- "Still Goebbels was well aware" - add comma after "Still" Done
- "for troops on the eastern front" - "eastern front" should be capitalized and linked
- "In actuality the defence of areas" - add comma before "actuality" Done I think you meant "after" :)
- "Göring's Luftwaffe attempted to retaliate" - no need to italicize "Luftwaffe" per WP:COMMON Done
- "to inject his six children with morphine so that when they were unconscious, an ampule of cyanide could be crushed in each of their mouths" - tweak to "to inject his six children with morphine so that when they were unconscious, an ampule of cyanide could then be crushed in each of their mouths" Done
- "and were given a coup de grâce immediately afterwards" - no need to italicize coup de grâce Done
- Article does not mention he received the Golden Party Badge. Add it somewhere. That is all I can find. If the rest of these issues are fixed, I'm passing the article. Jonas Vinther • (speak to me!) 19:07, 18 June 2015 (UTC)
- I have completed the tasks except for adding the Golden Party Badge, as it's not mentioned in any of the books I have here. Perhaps Kierzek has a source? -- Diannaa (talk) 22:06, 18 June 2015 (UTC)
- I don't know for a fact he received the Golden Party Badge; I just saw his article was in the recipients category so I assumed so. Jonas Vinther • (speak to me!) 23:46, 18 June 2015 (UTC)
- I don't recall reading it specifically but will double-check when I get home. Clearly he did receive it as he is shown wearing it in the photo we have up in the section: "Propagandist in Berlin", giving a speech in Berlin (1934). Kierzek (talk) 13:22, 19 June 2015 (UTC)
- To be honest, I think a Bundesarchiv image of him wearing it is just as good as a source. I'm passing this article, excellent job both of you. :) Jonas Vinther • (speak to me!) 16:44, 19 June 2015 (UTC)
- Jonas, thank you for your time and the review; and thanks to Diannaa, my cohort. Cheers, Kierzek (talk) 17:32, 19 June 2015 (UTC)
- To be honest, I think a Bundesarchiv image of him wearing it is just as good as a source. I'm passing this article, excellent job both of you. :) Jonas Vinther • (speak to me!) 16:44, 19 June 2015 (UTC)
- I don't recall reading it specifically but will double-check when I get home. Clearly he did receive it as he is shown wearing it in the photo we have up in the section: "Propagandist in Berlin", giving a speech in Berlin (1934). Kierzek (talk) 13:22, 19 June 2015 (UTC)
- I don't know for a fact he received the Golden Party Badge; I just saw his article was in the recipients category so I assumed so. Jonas Vinther • (speak to me!) 23:46, 18 June 2015 (UTC)
- I have completed the tasks except for adding the Golden Party Badge, as it's not mentioned in any of the books I have here. Perhaps Kierzek has a source? -- Diannaa (talk) 22:06, 18 June 2015 (UTC)