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edit@Munfarid1 , Can you review the article? Osman Mustafa Osman (talk) 23:31, 19 September 2022 (UTC)
- Hello @Osman Mustafa Osman:, as you can see, I have done some copyediting and added some comments for you. Generally, we don't need sources in the lead paragraph, but only later. The lead is supposed to give a short and clear version of the main points. - Also, we should first use reliable sources in English and when necessary other languages like Arabic. Not every source that just mentions the person is useful. They must give some meaningful and noteworthy information on the subject. - So please go over the article again and try to find more on him, while keeping only the most important information with reliable sources. - Also, you could translate your articles into Arabic and publish them on the Arabic WP (with more sources in Arabic for the Arab readers). Best regards, Munfarid1 (talk) 16:59, 20 September 2022 (UTC)
Well, I made Max Jay and the page was deleted. Can you help me to retrieve and review and check? Osman Mustafa Osman (talk) 22:26, 20 September 2022 (UTC)
Kamal Tarbas page, can it now be sent to the public domain? Osman Mustafa Osman (talk) 22:28, 20 September 2022 (UTC)
- After I have done some more copyediting and changed the picture size for the infobox, there are still several of your statements that need proper sources and clear wording. Maybe you can use some of the information in the Arabic article on Kamal Tarbas. - Also, I have deleted the Spanish language source you gave, as it only mentions the name of Tarbas as a singer, but there is nothing more about his importance as a notable singer. - I even have doubts about the photographs you have uploaded to Commons as your own work. For example, the second photo you added to the article about Hanan Bulu Bulu appears on several pages on the internet that seem to be much older than your upload. - Please understand that you are not allowed to upload images that you don't have taken yourself, for example with your camera or smartphone. Any image you just found on the internet is liable to be under copyright, and you cannot upload as your own work. - As this article is still a stub and not finished, you should first complete it and then submit it for review. - Finally, I can't find any article on Max Jay, and I am not competent on South Sudan, sorry. As long as you keep learning how to write a good article, I will be ready to assist. Munfarid1 (talk) 12:28, 23 September 2022 (UTC)
The picture of Hanan is older, but it is mainly for me. I own permission to upload it from Hanan personally, but I do not know how to prove it
Osman Mustafa Osman (talk) 12:46, 23 September 2022 (UTC)
- Hello @Osman Mustafa Osman, I have managed to find some more sources in English and done more copyediting. The article now has enough information and reliable sources, and I think you can move the draft to the mainspace now. Best regards, Munfarid1 (talk) 11:17, 5 November 2022 (UTC)