Talk:Kapsan faction incident/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Piotrus (talk · contribs) 11:27, 3 October 2019 (UTC)

Very interesting and well written article. Few comments:

• while I support WP:RED should Choe Chae-ryon be linked? Is she notable on her own?
• "Pak's ally Yi Hyo-sun was charged of personally failing covert operations in South Korea" - this sentence is unclear, please rewrite. ("personally failing covert operations" doesn't make sense). If it relates to the next sentence, please make it more obvious.
• Kim acquired permission from his loyal party members in a secret meeting to remove the Kapsan faction -> do we know the date of this meeting?
• Pak Kum-chol was sent to work in a factory in the countryside and later executed -> do we know the date of his execution?
• Even its name was omitted in propaganda until recently. -> can 'recently' be made more precise? Keep in mind in few decades this term will be of course incorrect
• pausing for now, will finish reviewing soon

Thank you, Piotrus.

•  Done: I've unlinked Choe Chae-ryon
•  Doing... Will rephrase the sentence
  •  Done it.
•  Doing... The source says March, but the warnings were also in March. I'll have to think about how to word this.
• I'll have to check a few more sources at the library. Apparently, some sources give a date and also talk about a possible suicide.
  •  Done now.
•  Doing... The source is a bit ambiguous on whether the actual name of the speech returned or just mentions of it. Anyway, this happened during Kim Jong-il's rule. I'll have to figure out how to phrase it.
  •  Done!

Cheers – Finnusertop (talk ⋅ contribs) 21:59, 3 October 2019 (UTC)

• • Thanks! Continued:
  • The Kapsan Faction Incident was "a watershed in North Korean politics". -can we attribute this quote?
  • maybe add a picture of the Kim Il-sung and Kim Jong-il badges the aftermath, the article is pretty sparse on images
  • That's it, once all of those are addressed I think it's good go go! One final thought: I think you can use material from this to stub a number of relevant articles, even without further research. --_{Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| reply here} 09:14, 4 October 2019 (UTC)

You're welcome, Piotrus.

•  Done attributing the quotation.
•  Done. I'm happy to add a picture from Kim Il-sung and Kim Jong-il badges, which happens to be another one of my GAs.
• North Korean politics is my primary editing interest, so I'll have plenty of chances to do this. Thank you for the encouragement! – Finnusertop (talk ⋅ contribs) 15:00, 5 October 2019 (UTC)

Yours – Finnusertop (talk ⋅ contribs) 15:00, 5 October 2019 (UTC)

Great, passing :) Through I'd suggest replacing the single Britannica ref with non-tertiary source. --_{Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| reply here} 03:04, 6 October 2019 (UTC)