Talk:Kardinya, Western Australia

Latest comment: 2 years ago by Vacant0 in topic GA Review

GA Review

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This review is transcluded from Talk:Kardinya, Western Australia/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: Vacant0 (talk · contribs) 13:13, 2 January 2022 (UTC)Reply

Hi! I saw this article on the GAN backlog. I will start the review asap. Cheers, --Vacant0 (talk) 13:13, 2 January 2022 (UTC)Reply

Good Article review progress box
Criteria: 1a. prose ( ) 1b. MoS ( ) 2a. ref layout ( ) 2b. cites WP:RS ( ) 2c. no WP:OR ( ) 2d. no WP:CV ( )
3a. broadness ( ) 3b. focus ( ) 4. neutral ( ) 5. stable ( ) 6a. free or tagged images ( ) 6b. pics relevant ( )
Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked   are unassessed

Comments

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General

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  • Although optional, I would prefer the addition of a {{short description}} on top of the article.
  • Link the "European settlement" in the lede and "Before European colonisation" section with the History of Australia (1788–1850) article.
  • Rest of the lede is alright and it is well-written. It satisfies the manual of style.
  • Move the "History" section above the "Geography and natural history" section which can be renamed to "Geography and nature".
  • Link dunes in the Geography section. The rest of the section is good.
  • "They lived on the area south" → isn't this supposed to be "in the area"?
  • Law and order can be linked in the "European colonisation" section.
  • Would prefer "The suburb was home to 8,730 people at the Australian Bureau of Statistics's 2016 census" → The suburb was home to 8,730 people according to the Australian Bureau of Statistics's 2016 census.
  • "It sold groceries and had a petrol pump. That was demolished in the 1970s." – these two sentences should be merged.
  • "Kardinya in the City of Melville local government area." → Kardinya is located in the City of Melville local government area.
  • Link "centre-left" with centre-left politics and "centre-right" with centre-right politics.
  • Labor Party and Liberal Party should be capitalized.

Images

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  • Thanks for taking the pictures, they look great. Alt texts are also included, great!

Sources

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  • 2016 census source is used multiple times in the article, it can be removed from the infobox per MOS:INFOBOXREF.
  • "However, especially for objects like boundaries (of neighborhoods, allotments, etc.), where other reliable sources are available they should be preferred over Google Maps and Google Street View." – if there is a different reliable source that is not Google Maps then you should replace the Google Maps source with the different one, otherwise it can stay if there aren't any.
  • Rest of the sources are reliable and they can stay.

@Steelkamp: I will put the article on hold until these small things get fixed. Good job! --Vacant0 (talk) 14:52, 2 January 2022 (UTC)Reply

@Vacant0: Thank you for doing this. I have made all the changes you asked. Steelkamp (talk) 16:06, 2 January 2022 (UTC)Reply
No problem, thanks for fixing it. I'm promoting this to GA. --Vacant0 (talk) 16:33, 2 January 2022 (UTC)Reply