Talk:Kat (Gravity Rush)/GA1

Latest comment: 1 year ago by LunaEatsTuna in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: LunaEatsTuna (talk · contribs) 03:17, 25 February 2023 (UTC)Reply

Looks interesting! I will review this later today (my time zone is UTC).  LunaEatsTuna (💬)— 03:17, 25 February 2023 (UTC)Reply

That should be all! I have placed this on hold for now and left some comments below. Please ping me once you have addressed my concerns otherwise I may not respond. Thanks,  LunaEatsTuna (💬)— 23:03, 25 February 2023 (UTC)Reply
Everything looks good to go! Nice work on the Ark of Time addition as well. I am now happy to pass this article for GA status per the changes implemented. Congrats on the fantastic article!  LunaEatsTuna (💬)— 18:19, 27 February 2023 (UTC)Reply

Copyvio check

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Earwig says good to go. Quotations are used in-line with WP:COPYQUOTE.

File

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The image is relevant, appropriate and copyright-free:

  • File:Gravity Rush 2 Kat.png: valid public domain rationale; downscaled image.

Prose

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  • Add the abbreviation for downloadable content in parentheses so "In that game's DLC chapter" makes sense for readers unfamiliar with thr abbreviation.
  Done
  • Does PlayStation Matsuri have to have quotation marks?
  Done
  • Is her love of food prominently noted or referenced throughout one or both of the games she is in? Otherwise I do not see it as particularly noteworthy.
  Done
  • "they create Gryps or Sphinx, a far larger guardian with immense power, depending on who initiates the transformation, Kat or Raven." – does Kat create Gryps and Raven Sphinx? If so, end the sentence with "respectively." to better indicate this.
  Done - Although I rephrased it more.
  • Wikilink amnesia in § Appearances.
  Not done - Linked in lede already.
  • Pages are linked twice in an article—once for their first mention in the lede and first mention in the body of an article. I went ahead and wikilinked it since this is only a small change.
  • "with a new mysterious enemy." – any more elaboration on this?
  Done - Did a rewrite of a lot of the plot summary
  • "Climbing the World Pillar, she discovers" – recommend "Kat discovers" as she is used quite a few times in the previous sentence.
  Done - See above
  • "but she is hinted at being alive in the ending" how about "but is hinted as being alive." Relatedly:
  • "in the ending" – the end credits/an end scene?
  Done - See above
  • "as a playable downloadable content character" – DLC character would work here per my comments above.
  Done
  • "similar to how Kat "falls" through" – does falls need quotation marks here?
  Not done - This is meant to indicate that while Kat is technically falling, it's not completely uncontrolled. But if you have a better idea, tell me.
  • Ah, I see. Hmm not sure honestly.
  • "better-received." – I do not think the hyphen is needed here, but I could be incorrect.
  Done
  • I would wikilink Western to Western world.
  Done
  • "found characters who react realistically to the situation relatable" – recommend "found characters who react realistically to situations relatable"? Or, was this during beta testing etc.?
  Done
  • "Twinfinite called Kat" – should also mention the article author.
  Done

Refs

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Passes spotcheck on refs 2, 7, 12, 14, 19 and 24. Nice work.

Other

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Section formatting, nav, other templates and cats good.

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  • Please add WP:ALT text to the image if you do not mind.
  Done

@LunaEatsTuna: I have made most suggested changes, please tell me if there is anything more necessary. ᴢxᴄᴠʙɴᴍ () 07:03, 27 February 2023 (UTC)Reply

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