Hello @Vycl1994:. My preference is to represent Dewes as a “peace campaigner” rather than an “anti-nuclear activist” in the lead, because the latter sounds like placard waving, whereas my reading of all the sources highlights that Dewes has spent her life campaigning for peace, working within the UN and World Court to advocate for disarmament of all types of weapons – not just nuclear. Your input is welcome. Herewhy (talk) 01:44, 23 October 2019 (UTC)Reply
- I haven't returned to the article since my edits in July 2019, so I've had a look in the edit history to refresh my memory and aim to offer the best explanation I can for my edits in July. The WP:LEDE is used for a description of notability in all articles. In biographical articles, this principle is put in practice thusly: ledes for businesspeople describe companies they founded or in which they held highly ranked executive positions, summaries of athletic careers include teams played for or competitions in which they earned a medal, and politicians are described by offices held. This means that ledes about activists should describe the causes they supported. At the time of my changes to the lede of this article, her participation in the anti-nuclear movement was noted in the infobox, so I used that to make changes to the lede. (As an aside, I later removed the unnecessary personal details from the infobox description of her activism.) I believe that information for the lede should be summarized from the body of the article, and information for the infobox should be a concise summary of the lede. Although WP:CONCISE leads to a section on article title policy, I try to make it true for article content as well. "Anti-nuclear activist" highlights one specific cause, but emphasizing notability is the very point of the lede. I also believe that a simple description reads more neutrally than campaigner, pioneer, or other such words. I personally prefer to see a mention of anti-nuclear in the lede or that, in the interest of conciseness, peace campaigner be shortened to pacifist, in much the same way that the right to vote is called suffrage and activists for that cause are referred to as suffragists. "Activist for disarmament" would encompass more of Dewes' work generally, and likely be more precise than pacifist. Vycl1994 (talk) 04:45, 23 October 2019 (UTC)Reply
- Thank you for your suggestion and helpful explanation. I will amend the lead section to "activist for disarmament" Herewhy (talk) 00:38, 28 October 2019 (UTC)Reply
On 10 Oct 2019, an anonymous IP address altered the segment “she and a growing number of New Zealanders” to “she and a number of New Zealanders”. How many? To me, this amendment makes it sound as though she wandered out with a couple of mates, whereas, official government history records how small-scale protest turned into popular movement and then to political action, and over time became beyond politics and an engrained conviction in the New Zealand public’s mind. Herewhy (talk) 00:27, 28 October 2019 (UTC)Reply
