Talk:Katie Chapman/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 17:20, 23 August 2011 (UTC)

I'll review this article shortly. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 17:20, 23 August 2011 (UTC)

Here are the issues I found:

• "in her hometown of Bermondsey, then, at the age of ten," I'd put a period at Bermondsey, then start a new sentence with At.
• "In June 2000 Chapman signed a contract with newly professional Fulham, to" no comma needed after Fulham. I would prefer commas after in (year), but that's not required.
• "Mid way through season 2007–08" reword to "Midway through the 2007-08 season"
• A lot of paragraphs start with "In (year)..." Try modifying a few of them to make it feel less repetitive.
• You have ages listed as "ten-year-old" and "16 year old". Keep hyphenations consistent.

I'll put the article on hold and will pass it when the issues are fixed. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 02:48, 27 August 2011 (UTC)

Much appreciated, I've tried to iron out the issues mentioned. Clavdia chauchat (talk) 18:44, 27 August 2011 (UTC)

Everything looks good now, so I'll pass the article as a GA. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 01:40, 28 August 2011 (UTC)