Talk:Kenneth Gärdestad/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 16:33, 22 September 2019 (UTC)

Comments

• Lead is a touch brief, could add some more about Eurovision, book writing, activism etc.
• Our article on Oh, vilken härlig dag has a g, rather than a ', can we be consistent?
• "in Eurovision 1979 finishing" comma after 1979.
• "Lyricist Gärdestad..." weird, probably switch "Lyricist" for "Kenneth"... and perhaps "writing lyrics performed by Lotta..."
• "He took part again in Melodifestivalen 2010 with" well no, he took part in Melodifestivalen again, not the 2010 version again.
• "Musikförläggarnas pris" is there an article for this on Swedish Wikipedia?
• and for his work in it, and many wonderful lyrics."[7] - missing an opening quote mark somewhere.
• Most articles like this usually have a section listing the awards in one place.
• "wrote the book Jag vill ha en egen måne (2005), a biography..." probably don't need "the book" as you go on to refer to it as a biography so it's pretty clear it's a book.
• Ted – För kärlekens skull - our article uses a colon rather than a spaced en-dash. Consistency once again?
• Again, do we have a .sv article for Peter Viitanen?
• "(last episode season 7)" probably not required as you mention that in the prose in the following sentence.
• "was head architect" can we put a timeframe on that?
• "There are more than 80 Kunskapsskolan schools..." not sure how directly relevant it is to this bio.
• "Gärdestad revealed..." Kenneth. Perhaps in fact make that a first sentence of a new paragraph and then merge the death sentence.
• "Ted Gärdestadstipendiet" in the caption, "Ted Gärdestad Stipend" in the article, perhaps be consistent.
• Avoid SHOUTING in the refs.
• Since those ref publishers/works aren't necessarily well known to English speakers, perhaps you could link them where you can.

That's about it on a first run through. It's on hold for the moment. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 17:34, 22 September 2019 (UTC)

• Thank you so much for good pointers. I have tried to fix the issues you pointed out. Please let me know if I missed something. I am looking forward to any possible further notes. Thanks again.BabbaQ (talk) 18:22, 22 September 2019 (UTC)

BabbaQ no problem, I've tweaked it a few times, feel free to work it over again, but I'm now satisfied we have a GA here. Well done. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 16:21, 23 September 2019 (UTC)

• Thank you. It feels great that the article now is GA. And thank you for all your help and good notes. BabbaQ (talk) 17:37, 23 September 2019 (UTC)