Talk:Kerry slug/GA1

GA Review

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I will begin reviewing this article. As it stands, it looks very choppy with alot of small sections. I will meld them a little for prose. Please revert any changes I make where I inadvertently change the meaning. I will post queries below. Casliber (talk · contribs) 02:41, 1 September 2009 (UTC)

I will try to help with the fix-up process wherever I can. Invertzoo (talk) 15:26, 2 September 2009 (UTC)

• ...dusky-ochreous, indistinctly trifasciate.. - if possible, describe in plainer English terms.

Done. Also explained "caudal gland", "dermal mucus" and "locomotory mucus". Invertzoo (talk) 15:36, 2 September 2009 (UTC)

• foot-fringe also

The term foot-fringe is self explanatory. It can be seen File:Slug parts.png, but it is not even explained in the slug article. --Snek01 (talk) 23:04, 1 September 2009 (UTC)

I have attempted to define foot fringe in the text. Invertzoo (talk) 15:46, 2 September 2009 (UTC)

• It was also referred from France but never confirmed - I think this loses something 'collected'?

This information is referenced in the article. This means, that somebody wrote that it occurs in France, but nobody trust this without an evidence. --Snek01 (talk) 23:04, 1 September 2009 (UTC)

I attempted to make this clearer. It may be OK now? Invertzoo (talk) 15:46, 2 September 2009 (UTC)

• The mating of this species is described in Platts & Speight (1988). - why not summarise it here?

These literature would be the most useful for this and for future improvements, but I have not them: --Snek01 (talk) 23:04, 1 September 2009 (UTC). I don't have access to them either. Invertzoo (talk) 15:56, 2 September 2009 (UTC)

• Platts E. A. & Speight M. C. D. 1988
• Boycott A. E. & Oldham C. 1930
• Wiesniewski P. J. 2007 - added to the article

Snek01 comments: I have some hints to possible improving:

• Image of cerebral ganglia seems to be obvious, but there is no information about nervous system of this species in the literature. So this image is only supporting.
• There is mentioned nothing about Gwatkin's works in biology in his article, so the image description is informative but without consequences. --- OK, I have added at least one Gwatkin's malacological work into his article. --Snek01 (talk) 23:08, 16 September 2009 (UTC)
• There are already two wikilinks to Disjunct distribution#Lusitanian distribution. It can be emphasized somehow, because it explain distribution of this species in theory.
• add type of the radula
• I am not sure about notability of Thomas Rogers, so there is a wikilink to disambig page with dates only.
• A photo from its typical habitat in Ireland and in Iberia would be fine, but I found no one with I could be sure.
• What is better Robert Welch / Robert John Welch?
• There is not much explained regulation SI 112/1990 in the article, but I do not know how to find this regulation.
• Ramos 1998 (added to the article --Snek01 (talk) 09:23, 16 September 2009 (UTC))
• If somebody could check Moorkens 2006, then they could be added as references as usual.

--Snek01 (talk) 23:04, 1 September 2009 (UTC)

Comment by Sasata (talk) 18:26, 5 September 2009 (UTC) Hi, thought I'd throw in my 2c:

• Check out this article, might be worth a mention: Wisniewski PJ. (2000). "Husbandry and breeding of Kerry spotted slug Geomalacus maculosus at the endangered species breeding unit, Martin Mere". International Zoo Yearbook 37:319-321.

Cultivating slugs - I love it :) Casliber (talk · contribs) 21:16, 5 September 2009 (UTC)

"Slug husbandry" - it's what all the cool kids are doing. Sasata (talk) 21:41, 5 September 2009 (UTC)

Expanded from this source. --Snek01 (talk) 17:23, 15 September 2009 (UTC) (excellent) Casliber (talk · contribs) 03:53, 16 September 2009 (UTC)

• Also sections are better as flowing prose - I'd do the following two myself but am stuck a little -

Circulatory and excretory system: The heart is completely surrounded by the triangular kidney, which is of lamellate structure, and discharges by means of a primary and secondary ureter...

I think I have fixed the prose here. Invertzoo (talk)

Muscles: The cephalic retractors have the typical Arionine character. (i.e. incorporate the words before the colon into the text - also explain 'Arionine'.

I also worked on this section. Invertzoo (talk) 00:43, 16 September 2009 (UTC)

Overall I should probably define more terms. Invertzoo (talk) 00:43, 16 September 2009 (UTC)

OK, going by the criteria now - checking if the article is:

1. 1. Clearly written, in good prose with correct spelling and grammar. Also look for proper formatting and general organization of the article, with appropriate use of wikilinks and sections as described in those parts of the Manual of Style referred to in the Good article criteria.  Done
   2. Factually accurate according to information in reliable sources, preferably with inline citations using either footnotes or Harvard (parenthetical) references, and no OR.  Done

1. 1. Broad in coverage of the topic without unnecessary digressions.  Done
   2. Written from a neutral point of view.  Done
   3. Stable, with no ongoing edit wars (constructive routine editing is fine).  Done
   4. Compliant with image use policy. Images are encouraged but not required. If images are used, they should have free licenses, or have appropriate fair use rationales.  Done

• Update - I probably should have done this before - just really needs the one ref for the defensive behaviour and I think I can be generous and let it slide over the line for GA status. it would be good to format the references properly though in cite format. Casliber (talk · contribs) 04:44, 25 September 2009 (UTC)

OK, we're there. Casliber (talk · contribs) 20:06, 25 September 2009 (UTC)