Talk:Keshavrao Sonawane/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Wizardman (talk · contribs) 15:51, 21 January 2017 (UTC)

I'll give this a review. Wizardman 15:51, 21 January 2017 (UTC)

Here's what I found:

• "He was elected as MLA for 4 times" elected to the MLA. Also put MLA in parentheses after Maharashtra Legislative Assembly.
• You need spaces after punctuation.
• I don't know if the cite needed tag in the infobox is required but it certainly needs to be addressed.
• "Keshavrao Sonawane was political mentor of Prominent Political Leaders like Vilasrao Deshmukh,Shivraj Patil." This isn't noted elsewhere in the article, violating WP:LEAD, also needs further clarification if you're going to include it at all.
• "Keshavrao Sonavane was one who helped Shivaraj Patil to get his first break to stand from Latur Constituency" huh? Also the source is just to a google book link, you have to at least include the page(s).
• The Lead shouldn't need references ad the information should be elsewhere in the article.
• "Keshavrao Sonawane, a lawyer from small town called Latur got" rm a small town, superfluous.
• Spell out LLB at first mention (Bachelor of Laws) so people know what you're talking about.
• " Keshavrao because of his legislative experience and his farmer’s family roots." You mean farmer's family roots? Also, nothing about his family is mentioned int he early life section; is nothing out there?
• Come to think of it, there's nothing on his personal life in the article at all.
• "in the latur region." Latur
• "And as an aftermath of this he lost the assembly " no starting sentences with and.

The rest was just on a skim just to note the most significant issues:

• "Before passing this law , every market committee was having its own rules, this law made all market committees in Maharashtra to have single central administrative law under state control. " I think i get what's its saying but it needs to be completely reworded.
• 'Earlier Latur was small town in the Osmanabad District." huh? this seems completely out of place.
• "in the May month of year 1961" Just say in May 1961, that's silly.
• " Currently terna has 3500 TCD capacity.factory covers area of 3 talukas i.e. Osmanabad,Kallamb and Latur.this factory covers nearly 171 villages by area of operation" This is basically unreadable as is.
• "Uchalya novel is an autobiographical account of the life of a stereotyped underdog but of a representative of a section of society thriving on petty crimes." And now we have unsourced POV too.

This article, if I'm being honest, is bad. It basically needs a rewrite from scratch, and then a copyedit after that. I shouldn't be finding issues with every single sentence. The sources appear to be decent, but even that needs fine tuning. Nothing redeemable here as this article easily fails GA status. Wizardman 16:08, 21 January 2017 (UTC)