Talk:Kevan Thakrar/GA1

GA Review

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Nominator: Mujinga (talk · contribs) 21:14, 7 September 2024 (UTC)

Reviewer: It is a wonderful world (talk · contribs) 22:07, 25 October 2024 (UTC)

This one's pretty grim but short enough to finish before I go to sleep!

Hi @It is a wonderful world: thanks for taking this one, I've replied to yourr points. Mujinga (talk) 18:15, 26 October 2024 (UTC)

Thank you, all have been adequately addressed, so I will pass! It is a wonderful world (talk) 18:41, 26 October 2024 (UTC)

Prose clock

Lead

after his brother Miran murdered three men: I think it should be clearer that Kevan was with Miran when he murdered.

clarified Mujinga (talk) 18:13, 26 October 2024 (UTC)

Murders

which had been -> "he had"

rewritten Mujinga (talk) 18:13, 26 October 2024 (UTC)

Link "submachine gun"

done Mujinga (talk) 18:13, 26 October 2024 (UTC)

found guilty of helping him to escape: Is there a specific charge this can be linked to?

source justs says "guilty of assisting an offender."

Link "Southwark Crown Court"

done Mujinga (talk) 18:13, 26 October 2024 (UTC)

I think link "life imprisonment" so a reader can read further into the seeming contradiction between "life" and "35 years"

linked above Mujinga (talk) 18:13, 26 October 2024 (UTC)

Prison

Shouldn't "CSCs" just be "CSC" in this instance?

good spot! changed Mujinga (talk) 18:13, 26 October 2024 (UTC)

he denied: Is "appealed" a better word here?

i don't think so, since an appeal would be what you do if already convicted. instead, he denied the charges Mujinga (talk) 18:13, 26 October 2024 (UTC)

Perhaps link "Durham" and "Milton Keynes"

Durham done, MK already done Mujinga (talk) 18:13, 26 October 2024 (UTC)

Thakrar was held in Close Supervision Centres: Abbreviate to "CSCs" for consistency

done Mujinga (talk) 18:13, 26 October 2024 (UTC)

Link "Incarcerated Workers Organising Committee"

to what? aha! Incarcerated Workers Organizing Committee with a Z - done Mujinga (talk) 18:13, 26 October 2024 (UTC)

his judicial review of being in the CSC for 749 consecutive days was heard: I assume this had an outcome?

not yet I don't think, but that's not too surprising as it can take years Mujinga (talk) 18:13, 26 October 2024 (UTC)

Sources Y

Health/formatting Y

Reliability Y

One journal, and all the rest reliable news sources.

Spot check Y

[1, 2a]: Y

[6, 7a]: Y

[15]: Y

[16]: Y

Scope Y

Appears that no important information is omitted

Copyvio Y

13.0% on Earwig, no too close paraphrases detected.

Stable Y

Media Y

None, unfortunately.

Captions Y

Tags Y

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