Talk:Kingdom Hearts Coded/GA2

GA Review

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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 21:33, 4 April 2016 (UTC)

I'll have this finished soon. A day or two at least. JAGUAR  21:33, 4 April 2016 (UTC)

Initial comments

• "Coded was a Japan-only release announced at the 2007 Tokyo Game Show" - needs italicisation
• "Gameplay is mostly puzzle solving, with action-RPG gameplay elements" - reads slightly awkward, how about The game play is centered mostly around puzzle solving, with action-RPG gameplay elements?
• "Mini-games and platforming are also featured" - link minigame and platform game
• "Tetsuya Nomura decided to create a Kingdom Hearts spin-off for cell phones" - cell phones or mobile phones? Should be consistent throughout
• "This leads king Mickey and friends" - This leads king Mickey and his friends?
• "The game received mixed reviews, with reviewers praising the graphics and gameplay variety" - 'review' overload, how about The game received mixed reviews, with critics praising? Feel free to ignore this part
• "Kingdom Hearts Re:coded had an added system to incorporate multiplayer experiences called "tag mode"" - should be in present tense
• "The story was supposed to be "fluid", so not strictly sticking into the chronology of the Kingdom Hearts series" - the latter half sounds a bit unencyclopedic, how about The story was initially supposed to be "fluid" and did not adhere into the chronology of the Kingdom Hearts series
• "so the planned expansion to other Japanese phone carriers and to America were not possible" - always prefer 'United States'
• No dead links
• Dab links OK

I'll leave this on hold until all of the above are clarified. Let me know if you have any questions JAGUAR  20:01, 5 April 2016 (UTC)

All the issues have been addressed, and am happy to conclude that this meets the criteria. Well done! JAGUAR  17:34, 6 April 2016 (UTC)