Talk:Kishōtenketsu

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Is it a good idea for the page to be talking about "Chinese characters" initially and then turning around and using just Japanese for the rest of it?60.241.136.181 (talk) 08:22, 9 September 2008 (UTC)

Incorrect Citation

I've just checked the Maynard book for the two citations given. He does in fact discuss kishōtenketsu, but the page numbers given are incorrect. Pages 33 and 34 are a discussion of "Amae and Social Interaction". The kishōtenketsu discussion occurs at the end of chapter 2, from page 159-162. The information given in the article matches the Maynard; it's just some wrong page numbers. I'm updating the article accordingly. EDIT: Oh, and as far as I can tell he doesn't use the photocopying example anywhere in the book. So I removed the second Maynard citation. Tinalles (talk) 22:09, 19 December 2008 (UTC)

More descriptive examples, please

1. This article needs more extensive examples. To a Western reader (hey, it's in English), the examples are brief and cryptic:

   Ki (起?): Daughters of Itoya, in the Honmachi of Osaka.
   Shō (承?): The elder daughter is sixteen and the younger one is fourteen.
   Ten (転?): Throughout history, generals (daimyo) killed the enemy with bows and arrows.
   Ketsu (結?): The daughters of Itoya kill with their eyes.

Given an example like this (above), I would probably not be able to write in the Kishōtenketsu form, nor recognize a story written in this structure when I read it.

Having looked at the article in the german-language wikipedia I try to explain this: The first verse introduces the female characters of the story. The second verse gives more details about both main characters. Verse three goes astray to an unrelated territory. Verse four explains: The main characters of the story seduce men with their eyes - killing them just as the generals who kill with bows and arrows. 21:40, 12 April 2017 (UTC) — Preceding unsigned comment added by 2.247.252.186 (talk)

2. I don't know what the following means. It has no examples nor elucidation, so far:

"In the structure of narrative and yonkoma manga, and even for document and dissertation, the style in Kishōtenketsu applies to sentence or sentences, and even clause to chapter as well as the phrase for understandable introduction to conclusion."

108.232.2.70 (talk) 03:50, 16 October 2013 (UTC)

Japanese example poem

After some quick research, more info is definitely needed on the poem used as an example in the Japan section. It seems to be a classical example of the structure used in Japanese literature and not a random example as I had initially assumed. In addition, the author attributed seems to have in fact been the person who recorded an existing folk song or rhyme, not the inventor, and different people seem to have recorded variants on the location given in the poem. I've corrected the existing text into Japanese characters in order to conform with the rest of the article, but this is mostly a cosmetic fix and doesn't address the underlying lack of clarity. Prujo (talk) 23:53, 5 October 2022 (UTC)

I added credit for the diagram but it got taken out?

Yeah I credited the diagram to https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Tfi0FvD9Yu0 who are own voices for the diagram, but for some reason it was taken out and I'd like to know why? I'm adding it back in. I created the diagram based on their video. Please do not take out credit.--KimYunmi (talk) 16:54, 31 August 2023 (UTC)

See MOS:CREDITS, any credits should be at the image description page (at https://commons.wikimedia.org/wiki/File:Kishotenketsu_Story_structure.png ) not in a caption in article space. Siawase (talk) 17:23, 31 August 2023 (UTC)

I read through the whole article and still have no idea what Kishōtenketsu is meant to describe

Screen317 (talk) 10:02, 14 December 2023 (UTC)

Working through the History

Yeah, the History section is a bit rough atm. I haven't found the importation point for Korea and Japan yet, but I suspect it's likely because of the examination thing, dating it around the Song Dynasty. I need to find the evidence and then I'll lay it in. I also coordinated this article with the Eight-Legged Essay so it lines up with what scholars actually said versus what wikipedia people hope it said. Cultural phenomena, as outlined, is sometimes really difficult to track down.--KimYunmi (talk) 02:09, 20 December 2023 (UTC)