Talk:La Nube/GA1

GA Review

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Nominator: Bsoyka (talk · contribs) 22:08, 13 August 2024 (UTC)

Reviewer: Sammi Brie (talk · contribs) 04:42, 19 October 2024 (UTC)

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written. a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): It is factually accurate and verifiable, as shown by a source spot-check. a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism): It is broad in its coverage. a (major aspects): b (focused): It follows the neutral point of view policy. Fair representation without bias: It is stable. No edit wars, etc.: It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate. a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall: Pass/Fail:
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Solid and needing just some general polish. One question about a reference. Ping when done.

@Sammi Brie: Thanks for taking the time to review! Responded to everything below. Bsoyka (t • c • g) 04:44, 21 October 2024 (UTC)

Copy changes

Lead

• The lead (once I reverted the puffery someone added) is rather short. One or two more sentences about featured exhibits, minimum, would really help.

  Added a sentence—let me know if more might be better. Bsoyka (t • c • g) 04:44, 21 October 2024 (UTC)

History

• Consider level-3 subheaders, maybe one for design and one for construction?

  Added. Bsoyka (t • c • g) 04:44, 21 October 2024 (UTC)

• Combine the "In September 2016" into the first paragraph so it is not a loner.

  Done. Bsoyka (t • c • g) 04:44, 21 October 2024 (UTC)

• Hyphenate "world-class".
• MOS:SEASONS try "early 2019" instead of "spring of 2019".
• Capitalize the T in T-shirt.

  All three above done. Bsoyka (t • c • g) 04:44, 21 October 2024 (UTC)

• maybe "El Paso Fire Department (EPFD)'s" instead of "El Paso Fire Department's (EPFD)"???

  I actually don't love either option, so I switched to "the response of the El Paso Fire Department (EPFD)" to avoid the acronym/possessive weirdness altogether. Bsoyka (t • c • g) 04:44, 21 October 2024 (UTC)

• with a ribbon-cutting ceremony at 10 a.m. followed by a public celebration until 4 p.m. Probably over-detail.

  Removed the time info. Bsoyka (t • c • g) 04:44, 21 October 2024 (UTC)

Sourcing and spot checks

• 3: When the city pitched a children’s museum idea to voters in 2012, it estimated the $19 million price tag would mostly be used to build the facility and program some exhibits. Y
• 6: The proposed El Paso Children's Museum received a $20 million boost from the city to ensure it offers a "world-class" educational experience, but at least one city representative believes even that won't be enough. The $20 million the city voted to issue in debt through certificate of obligation bonds combined with about $20 million in additional funding from a nonprofit partner, EPC Museum, boosts the total project budget to about $60 million. Voters approved $19.5 million in funding for the Children's Museum in 2012, as part of a $473 million quality of life bond package. The Children's Museum was one of three "signature" projects. The other two were a multipurpose arena and a Hispanic Cultural Center. I don't think this goes to "This decision faced some criticism from the community", but it checks out the rest. Y

  Sorry for my confusion, not sure I understand the issue here. "This decision faced some criticism from the community" isn't cited to ref 6 but rather to ref 10, which definitely covers community criticism. Bsoyka (t • c • g) 04:44, 21 October 2024 (UTC)

• 12: The team proposed a vaulted museum lifted of the ground, a design made to preserve public space and an interactive garden below. Y
• 16: Quote checks out. Y
• 20: The name of the new museum was chosen from a long list of more than 600 submissions by El Pasoans, and it was announced at a ceremony at Aoy Elementary School. Y
• 22: La Nube will open in early 2023. Y

Earwig mostly catches one long quote. but nothing else.

Images

The image is CC-BY-SA 4.0 licensed and permissible under the very limited scope of architectural copyright. The logo is appropriate fair use with NFUR.

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